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Old 12-18-05, 08:15 AM   #1
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<{[- A Tree's Journey -]}>

IP: 0B77 CF88

Mended, Mistreated an Crafted
Into a rotten Smelly casket

Stolen from Home...
Home...
Crowded with Warmth..Warmth that enhabits the Aroma of the air
Dew drips...As the sun embraces it's surface
as it operates as a slight furnace
that doesn't burn...But brightens a Wood's furnish

Stolen from home.....
Now brought to the fork in the road...

Stolen from Home...
Mutated into either a box...
with many mournful horrids
with life's victims in storage
Amidst that painful emotion,Enormous...
A rusty palace, for a motionless resident....
Where his past would flourish

Or Stolen from Home...
Mutated into a weak surface
bendable, flammable, crumbled....
weak...but transformed into a powerful tool...
Into a repository of powerful letters
That form a powerful word...
That forms a powerful sentence...
Started weakened, but used by a tip of a pen
to be transformed into a Prepotent Creature
With the adjectives of a prepotent sentence...
and the verbs of a prepotent Word
and the blueprint of a prepotent letter
Started weakened...But ended as a Potent document...
A potent proof...A potent showcase
of the potency of a paper....
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Old 12-19-05, 11:22 AM   #2
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UppN sleeperz....
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Old 12-20-05, 05:23 AM   #3
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uppin assholes................
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Old 12-26-05, 01:12 PM   #4
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Wow man, surprisingly a very well done piece. Usually I expect more underdeveloped for newer heads around Rv.

This piece was filled with just beautiful descriptions. You desided to utalize free verse structure which, I dont particularly like, but you pulled off very nice. You had a little scattered rhyme scheme that traced itself within the stanza's throughout the piece which I really like. It didn't make your words a slave to rhyme which in the end make the piece sound very real rather then 'Humpty Dumpty' like. Nice job man, keep up the good work.
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