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02-11-07, 10:59 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
ight well man it was a cool story...flow might be on depending on your delivery for text its a lil off with the structure but def can be pulled off in audio..story wasnt bad but needs more imagry to grab attention but keep it up
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02-19-07, 10:08 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: 6EB4 89B8
uppin.......................
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03-09-07, 12:10 AM
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IP: 5492 2C2E
THAT WAS HARD, FLOW WAS CRAZY, I WISH THAT PEOPLE COULD HEAR THAT, LIVE BUT THAT WASUP KEEP UR HEAD UP PIMPIN.....................................http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=231461.........................................
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03-09-07, 04:37 PM
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IP: CF86 0039
it was a nice story tell.... pretty good but like fran el. depending on how u flow is how it goes... still i liked it... ur wording could have been better in some places... in others it was good. u could step up ur vocab a bit. but this was pretty decent. no doubt. good shit... i hope to see u improve some fam. check my shit out. the vibe of words...
and ps to P.A. leave better feed numnut! u aint gonna get fined for each word u right.... all ur feed is less then 2 lines... pick that shit up
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03-12-07, 12:44 AM
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don't try.
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
it didnt' really paint an image in my head...it was a pretty good though OM though. i enjoyed readin it though, keep it up
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03-15-07, 08:41 PM
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IP: 3E9E 35FE
It Waz Okay..... Topicz Were Played.......... Had A Fast Flow It Hit Good A Couple Times............. Keep Spittin And Try To Be Original Or Expand The Whole Thing
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03-18-07, 11:54 AM
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IP: 93B2 D602
ok no bad i see were you was goin with this one...you had the flow vocabulary and the complexity in each verse but i couldnt see much imagery in the first verse but thats coo cause you came with that in the second verse..i like what you did here it was a nice piece overall.........stay up...~1~.......
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03-19-07, 11:24 PM
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Human Crack in The Flesh.
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IP: BF46 0223
Gay.........................
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03-20-07, 06:09 PM
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New to RV
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IP: 81E7 DBC2
yea thats the thing about writin,usually only the one who wrote it knows how to spit it, so i can see this being audio, but as far as story tellin u got that 2 mane. keep doin what u doin
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04-07-07, 03:36 PM
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IP: 3F9E AEC0
it wuz coo mayn-liked da story side of it-got a grasp of how kenny was thinkin--
i didnt like the ending of part 2 couldve been better though but it was nice mayn |
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04-07-07, 04:01 PM
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IP: F618 C57D
I really enjoyed the story fam... It flowed pretty well. It is tough to tell a story and rhyme plus be complex at the same time, as someone said above. Keep em comin homey.
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04-08-07, 11:57 AM
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don't try.
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IP: 28AD 5545
Ah, I liked the story it was a pretty good read. I was feelin it, could of used a lil more vocab, but flow was okay and structure was nice. But if this was audio like you were sayin, it would be pretty dope, keep it up.
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04-09-07, 12:14 AM
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IP: EA63 E645
yeah man, good shit. wanna see part 2
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04-09-07, 01:19 AM
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IP: AC60 C1C9
I liked it man... Had some nice lines in there. I liked most of it keep it up playya
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04-09-07, 01:47 PM
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New Jack
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IP: 3299 9A42
i give it a 7 cause i think it was good but it could have been better
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