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08-21-06, 02:15 AM | #1 | ||||||
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Vail of Dreams
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"Thread softly, as you thread on my dreams"
Quite steps are taken, with pleasure i measure....from meters to inches. my stomach twists and turns, with pain i feel plain..as i wake to such a rush. gordion knots made, never to be untied i have died, the tears hug my cheek with stitches. clasped in a endless ritual, of transparent lies Another..an extra if taken, then these dreams are crushed. "Hold tight my dreams, as you hold them closely" Hands grab a hold of pureness
something so defined, as told my dreams fascinate Eye's fluster from the utter pain i explain...the agony of ones pressured burden to carry word's tattoo'd onto my own tongue still young...the bullrush onto your emotions and deteriate Grasp it em, grasp them ever so tightly i whisper lightly...you hold the excrusciating pain, sadly. you thread so vile, you tread so innocent your words more transparent, emotions run wild and beligerent. The sweet serenity of your dying presence caresses my heart with pouring love that tickles my emotions "she loves me, She loves me not" the feelings she fills me up right with knots and butterflies that roam how kind she is to me like the sun to a tree letting thou roots grow shamessly with intentions to barefruits and shade That was the past, AIR is our own future not wanting near of you anymore, i rest in silence for another "Dreams are more real than a knife slitting a wrist" Teeter, totter my emotions bleed. i bleed, non -stop strapped to the devils creed.
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08-21-06, 02:22 AM | #2 | ||||||
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08-24-06, 12:07 AM | #3 | |||||
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Nice man I liked this. Good read and I felt the emotion too.
Fav. Lines: how kind she is to me like the sun to a tree letting thou roots grow shamessly with intentions to barefruits and shade That was the past, AIR is our own future not wanting near of you anymore, i rest in silence for another http://community.rapverse.com/showt...460#post2824460 noice!
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08-24-06, 04:14 AM | #4 | ||||||
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thank you now i want myself in here to feed cus i love his opinions aswell as your though aswell mayne!...thanks will leave feed!.
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10-17-06, 05:12 PM | #5 | |||||||
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nice peace. I liked the the use of vocab and wordplay
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10-17-06, 06:36 PM | #6 | ||||
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Damn, I liked this one man!! nice vocab flow to it and everything i mean WOW man u put effort in this.
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