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Shiznit 5 100.00%
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Old 08-25-03, 08:38 PM   #1
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Shiznit vs. Da NFamous

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Round 1

10 Line Min.
20 Line Max.
Due: Tuesday, September 2nd.


Topic: Table For Two
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Old 08-25-03, 09:12 PM   #2
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Tampons are in.....*ahem*
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I mean Shiznit is in.. ladies and gentlemen.

Just like what Rb members always say. "That is WORD!"
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Old 08-25-03, 10:25 PM   #3
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Checkin in, wuts good Shiznit? Tis rather dope seeing you in a joust of poetic ability chip chip cheerio! 1luv.
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Old 09-02-03, 03:04 AM   #4
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Dreams intertwined through translucent patterns
Like streams flowing depending on wind-path turns
Consistent rhythms engulf with an exuberent embrace
Hearts beating together as the music sets its phase
So what if we have our fair share of disagreements
They're just summer storms in our lifetime of achievements
Like wheels on a car enduring bumps through rigid roads
We steer our destiny. Letting mirages in our minds close
Although minuscule fights affect each other's accounts
"It isnt what you say, but how you say it that counts"
The fact that only one direction the world evolves
Solving speradic difficulties as time continually dissolves
Our perfect relationship extended further in our hands
Scope through a mirror. Witness how strongly it stands
Irdiscent blue ocean breeze muster we constantly inhale
I breathe your name through my lungs as mine you exhale
Vows i pledge, for better or worse, in health or in sickness
Preventing a day of sorrow through love and forgiveness
Happiness cannot be a stagnant pool nor a motionless statue
But a life to pursue, For me and you, That's our Table for Two
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Old 09-02-03, 03:25 AM   #5
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reading this hurt my eyes but it was worth reading...
you had fit this title perfectly from start to finish shiznit..
utilizing the whole twenty line rule as well..
obviously judgement cant be passed but the amount
of no shows is annoying....this is very good though.

waiting for DaNFamous to finally post before..the deadline..2day

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Old 09-02-03, 03:28 AM   #6
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reading this hurt my eyes


^ Lay off the crack and get some sleep and you'll be able to read it fine in the morning...

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obviously judgement cant be passed but the ammount of no shows is annoying....this is very good though.



^See what I mean, if you were well rested and sober you would know that it's spelled "amount".

(yes, this is the new mod hazing period)

I think I am going to put in subsitutes for all of the no shows, that way we can have an active tourny. Might cause a delay of round 2 though, but that's better than having half the tourny no show.
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Old 09-02-03, 06:57 PM   #7
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sorry for the day late reply i had a situation but seeing how we are both past the deadline i assume all is cool....

I thoroughly abhor my clock's last tick tock, time's scorn in the flesh~
the current second's parents money and pussy it was born into death~
i was torn by the best the zenith of the truth in a clash~
i bash the untrue at my table for two with future and past~
right now holds my gift called the present but murky waters flood the soon~
i'll take a purple pill and know half of the two worlds both earth core and the moon~
a double bladed sword to severe ties in veigns unable to spew~
the precocious blood saved to dine on at this table for two~
ether fumes engulf the past pain radiates thru the foggy hate~
hell's fire sends smoke to the present resulting in a smoggy fate~
but a blade hath dulled as my present turns to the unkown~
graced by ecstacy life meets death and i am able to run home~
but as music begins a musical chairs scenario shows un-lies~
as shadows rise upon the future and in the past casts a sunrise~
the past though evil arrives early and graceful future arives late~
their roles plain stay unclear both entangled in joy and hate~
as the date and time shifts past stands to leave birthing present's presence~
soon future sprouts but too feel's time's heavy bearing evanescence~
conversing thru clenched teeth and lost time this situation i made it for you~
this fable it grew as i relay it to you my clock's table for two~

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Old 09-02-03, 08:03 PM   #8
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finally after seeing both pieces I can
say they were both well written seriously
and both have came from different angles
expanding their minds on a topic such as this
to represent this elevation process...
DaNfamous you did the damn thing
here forreal and brought great imagery as well
as vocabulary for this first round...thank you for
posting up on here man...this is gonna be a hard
one for the judges but theyre gonna be fair and
tell you why whoever deserves whatever....

both of you..well done

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Old 09-08-03, 10:57 PM   #9
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This was a hard one, Both of you did a damn good job on executing the theme of 'table for two'..NFamous, your verse had great imagery and symbolism but Shiznit's seemed so passionate..I also feel her's had a more poetic essence to it, and when it came allllll the way down to it, was better written. Both were nicely done, very focused on the topic and conclusive impactfully at the end, but only one can go on...so..

VOTE: SHIZNIT
 
Old 09-09-03, 12:21 AM   #10
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^I'm Going To Have To Agree..

Shiznits Verse Had Me Entrapped Within In The Verse..
I Loved The Flow Of it, The Imagery Was DOPE. And Also
The Vocabulary Was Off The Proverbial Hook.. Da NFamous..
Has Quite A Bit Of Work To Do, Until He Can Be At Shiznit's
Level, But Keep Elevating, And One Day You Will Be..

Vote : Shiznit
 
 


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