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12-05-05, 05:20 PM | #1 | ||||
I Chill in Asylums
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-tion (shun)
IP: E6DE 1541
i kno i cant be a 'doctor' cuz i aint got no 'patience'
sittin still waitin aint really my thing i need to have a station control the nation from everywhere underwater like a crustacean u facin one of the worst cuz my guns burst at any location dont get lost in translation i'll whip u like we on a plantation u my slave better work cuz there aint no vacations such a temptation to beat ur ass til u have complications my expectation is that u work without conversations dont rest and look at constellations or we'll have decorations of ur body hangin from some of the applications so many fustrations so hot like im eat somethin thats cajun there some implication that ur imitating my population i take offense to that there will now be no hesitations from my inclinations to kill all of ur inspirations no restorations of ur respirations now i have determinations killin u so much that now i gotta make reservations blowin u up makin evacuations happen with decapitations of communications configuration u need authorization to have nice accommodations and a manifestation my organization has recommendations of public relations quick freestyle im so bored Last edited by Bonafide : 12-06-05 at 02:49 PM. |
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01-01-06, 07:05 PM | #2 | ||||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP: 1152 1C7A
umm..... iight flow and rhyme scheme, but absolutely no topic, more like a battle.... and even then the punches weren't on point..... the best part was the slave thing cuz it was the most consistant...... sort of a Cass jump-off, like that my interpretation.... if ur gonna get into that, u gotta make sure ur punches are hard or funny, and u gotta step up ur voc. and make sure u use words in the right context.... i remember u from TTI, stay up playa, ur gettin better.......
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01-01-06, 08:21 PM | #3 | ||||
I Chill in Asylums
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IP: DBB7 5582
this piece wasnt my best i was real bored so i just threw something together real quick, really no thought to it, just tryin to up my vocab and shit like that. But thanks any way. If u wanna see something better of mine u should read Runnin'. U dont have to critique it or anything like that, but its up to u. Link's in my sig.
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