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Topic...
Sudden Death

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sudden death..ok...i got cheated last week cuz my cmputer...im still not happy about that mad man...check check

yay he put me in................................................ ...........................................

check check

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A drug deal, something simple, a quick exchange of cash//
Get the new-b to watch on the corner, make him cover your ass//
A little lump is in your pocket, just yelling "Dont fine me!"//
A little rock of fun, the spice of life, life of the party//
A shady character walks up, eyes darting at you, looking for a gun//
Blood shot eyes, milk pale skin, you can tell he hardly sees the sun//
A casual "Whats up" and he can tel in your eyes//
That at that moment you are his savior, the god of illegal highs//
You stare at each other for a second, your heart starts to race//
You start to come back on yourself, selling fake rock to his face//
It had been simple, just throw some ingredients in//
Fuck what happens to this junkie, since when were you him?//
A slip of the hand exposes cash and with a quick nod//
You jet off into the corner of the alley, ready to finish the job//
You hand him the Ziplock, the bag to his relief of tension//
This guy was smart, he did something you weren't expectin'//
A lighter in his left hand a pipe is in his right//
A quick crack and crack cocaine smoke penetrates the night//
He gives one puff on his pipe, his eyes fly open//
The flour you had decided to mix in had his black lungs choking//
His hand reaches across, he had one but stupidly you had none//
It glints in his hand, the key to your demise...in his palm was a gun//
Now his eyes were watering, his lungs were rejecting//
What ever it was you put in that fake crack-like thing//
He demands what you sold him you search for a choice//
Of whether to lie or tell him the truth, but you cant find your voice//
it dies in your throat, bt out you choke that it was misunderstanding//
"Give me the good shit" he says...he wasnt asking he was demanding//
You hastily explain how you had no more, but you could give him H instead//
He wasn't having it, with a crack and Sudden Death he sends a bullet through your head//

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4247#post574247
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4255#post574255

^^Those are the only battles done when I left^^

I'll have my links up soon...

Quick...I didnt kno it was due today...

His name was untitled - an orphan of sort - dropped out of school started playin a different type of sport/
His conscious court - was distort - in a depressant mood he ran his life with cocaine sniffed up the snort/
His nostrils burn - get that heavenly feelin - your head churns as your pulse rate starts up-healin/
He starts to dance - in a tribal way - his worries of money and emotional pain - found themselves a-stray/
Black clouds appear over his eyes - is it the end of his day? - 1 hr later he looks for more white-spray/
"Damn man i need to sniff one up real fast" Friend- " Com'on Dawg at that rate you'll never last"/
Puts his coat on - and catches the keys - jumps in the car - roars up the engine - and leaves a petroleum breeze/
Puts the breaks on - Goes into the alley - "Yo man, let me get some" - Dealer " Kid pay up the tally"/
Rummages through his pockets - but their's nuthin left - in desperation and anxiety he hits the man in the cleft/
Knee's him down - "haha take that clown" - puts his hands in his pockets and steals the crown/
Starts to make a dodge for it - but the Viper is too fast - he rams his leg into a trash can and does a 360 spin- CRASH!/
" See what happens when you cross the Viper" - Pulls out a pistol - 3 lead bullets go into the orphanted Cocaine sniper/
"Sirens" - everyone please clear the place - They put the man on the stretcher and look at his face/
He has a chance he's still breathing- "Did he eat a fruit-roll-up or are his teeth teething?/
"There's no way we can help him sir- the injury wounds point to his heart- thats probably his last breath"/
(At his Funeral) At the speed that boy was going at - with no one to show him the right way - he was destined for SUDDEN DEATH/

A2Z Had A Better Verse.. It Almost Seemed Like Similie Ripped The Concept Of A2Z'z Verse and Used It For Himself...

Vote A2Z

i agree ^^^^ my vote had to go to a2z....... great verses tho.... should have come more original sim, but good battle

hit up my battle with addlib

A2Z: wordplay: 8 for flow and consistency, rhyme scheme: 7 for stability, story: 8 for originality and hottness, total: 23

Simile: wordplay: 7 for consistency, rhyme scheme: 7 for consistency, story: 7 for hottness, total: 21

A2Z gets my vote, but Simile also had a good verse.....i dont think ya bit his verse

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I found A2Z's verse pretty good.
I didn't care that much for Simile's. Average, I guess.
A2Z's story played out in a much more cohesive fashion.
I also felt he killed Simile in "flow".
I was fairly impressed given your terrible record.

Vote = A2Z