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Your topic: Rest in peace

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=92320

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in.. i can't relate to the topic...
oops.. i can actually.. sorry grandpop

Death's secret.. unseen, soon to look farther
...from mother's womb.. to the funeral parlor
the subject's barly touched on.. nearly lisped
an angel sent.. to a loved one dearly missed
sore hearts.. to never rid of a wife's affection
death isnt uncommon, merely life's defection;
the picture fades, in new life it swirls & paints
the dead and newborn pass at pearly gates
old to new, life renewed im sure uve heard this
but everythings important, Lady D's webcam to birdshit..
times before life was over, great, simple pleasure
thorn in the side, made jovial to each simple measure
but i'll stop now... not to let this verses flavor worsen
& remember the death - of that favorite person.

match .

Last Year Third Of November... Worst Day Of My Life
Death Took Hold Of Cody... He Gave Up Without A Fight
Beautiful Out... Calm Winds And The Day Seemed Nice
Then The Devil Took Cody... But He Had No Price
I Had Shotgun.. Mom Drivin And Cody Layin In Back
I Was Half Awake.. And Then I Heard The Smash
Started Spinnin.... And There Was Nothing To Grasp
Not Even The Fact.. That My Bro's Life Is Now In The Past
No Cast... Died Instantly When We Spun Unto The Pole
Begged To God... To Give Me Back What He Seemingly Stole
Death Is Quick And Merciless... Which Makes Me Mad
I'm Beyond Sad... Searchin For A Reason Just To Be Glad
A Year Later... The Pain Still Lurks Inside My Heart
And Each Day Hurts Worse.. Than...

The Day You Departed...

True Story BTW... Cody Was My Brother... He Died Last Year In A Car Accident... So Ummm Yeah...

Vote It Up...

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^ i hope thats true. i think it prolly is, cuz ur a cool kid. some faggots do that in verses to make voters feel sorry for them though.

Nah Its Totally True... If You Need Proof I Can Just Post His Obituary If You Like... I'm Not That Kind Of Person That Would Make That Shit Up.

Edited The Obit Out... Iuno I'm Really Not Too Comfortable With All Of RB Seeing This.. But If You Think I'm Lying And It Weighs Your Vote Then PM Me And I'll Send It To You.

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yea. i wasn't saying you were lying, just that lots of kids do that.
lets not make this a freepost arena.. lol..
and you = not on aim...

so make you = on aim .

= Been On Aim... LoL...

Can We Get Some Votes In This ?

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Hmmm...

I know Aisle's is a true story and all...

It just really reminds me of something I wrote less than a month ago...

Real Horror...

Feeble threw down tightly as usual...

Good flow, good emotion, and real good "put myself in those shoes" aspect.

I felt this more because it spoke ta me...
The "Lady D" line was a great incorporation.

It let me miss who I wanted.

Very important.

Aisle's was tight too.
Lot's of personal emotion.
Kinda felt the "pity me" aspect, but if it really happened, aight.

I really feel these kinda drops should be left to Open Mic and not competition, cuz, now I feel bad for voting the other way.

Feeble's was just better and easier to relate to.

Peace

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hmm...


i feel that Feeble had the more conventional verse... this was good and bad.. it was good because he didnt have to take a risk with something new, and the end result turned out ok.. it was bad because it seemed like the same old same old. While Feebles story was nice and all, i felt as if Aisles' was better not only because it was true (hes spoken about this in the past) but because his heart was really into it.


vote-Aisle

Aisle 5 was a good spit deep, flow, wordplay

same with feeble
both were tight but im votein Aisle 5 coz i felt that verse

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Aight....listen....they were both decent verses, i undastand tha sympathy aisle is gettin, shit is tragic.....but in voting terms that doesnt guarantee you a win, tha difference:

Feeble: Rhymes Scheme: 8, Flow: 7, Story: 8, Total: 23
Aisle: Rhyme Scheme: 5, Flow: 7, Story: 8.5, Total: 20.5

Sorry about that ish Aisle, no hard feelins, but we are comparin stories and Wordplay herre....and feeble came harda,
Vote- Feeble, because his verse was betta, lol

peep my ish, peace, 1

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I Hope Your Not Implying That I'm Getting Votes Out Of Sympathy...

Whatever... Uppin.

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