Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

4-0 Tko

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 09-22-05 at 08:54 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Ryda has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-19-05 08:55 PM.

hey Tha 1 An Onlii B
u kno wat i see
a person tryin to spit like me
ill set my anger free
on thee
hope u kno i spit hot fire
i inspire
newbs like u
u now who u messin wit
afta this battle ull need a medical kit
ur heart will be broken
my raps are the finest
afta this battle ull be callin me highness
ill drop u like a bomb
fast and quick
cause my flow is just that sick
so u can just suck my dick
ill drop ya like scarface dropped cops
if u beat me ill give ya props

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Tha 1 An Onlii B has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-19-05 09:03 PM.

yo how could you possibly win when we start colliding
your name jus proves that your tha master of dick riding*
your absurd thinkin you can beat tha 1 an onlii
so im jus gonna prove to everyone that your a phony
you make me laugh wen thinkin your tha best of all-time
wen you git on tha mic u should be arrested for a crime
my vocab is high and thats why your so amiss**
dont worry i wouldnt expect you to comprehend my diss

*itz jus a little bit of nameplay

**amiss means confused(im workin on my vocab)

uppin fo votez on this homiez.....................

Voted For: Tha 1 An Onlii B

opener pretty good personal love to see them your structure much improved flow better than ive seen from you vocab was good too all around pretty good verse
yo how could you possibly win when we start colliding
your name jus proves that your tha master of dick riding*
this line was better than alll of his put otgether
ryda ur flow was good and thats it your structure wow work on that i dditn feel anythign in ur verse really no punches work on everything if you want help pm me and i will help you

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Voted For: Ryda

The only reason im voting for rider is a better flow ryda 6/10 The one and Onlii 5/10 closee battle

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

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yo thatz tha wackest vote i ever seen in ma life...yea he had an iight flow but i had everything else...ur vote makez no fuckin sense...maybe ur a dickrider but idk..im not too worried about it...no hate...hit me bak

Voted For: Tha 1 An Onlii B

there is some elevation needed on both sides............. but i'm gonna start ont he good points first........... Tha 1 An Onlii B had a pretty good flow......... better punchlines...........however many lines where played i was feeling the structure and i thought it lack creativity......... i see alot of potential but right now your lines are pretty basic try to incorporate more wordplay...............ryda i like the structure your flow ws better... however no punchlines........... you just kept talking about how great u are this is a battle concentrate on insulting ur oppenet.......... ur verse also lack substance add some wordplay metaphors puns.... whatever it takes ........ like i said i thought this battle was basic Tha 1 An Onlii B gets my vote base on harder hitting punchlines.... no hate just constructive critism take if you like...........PEACE 1

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just like the smilie says . . . can u spit . . . or u just gonna make me laff

thanx fo tha vote mayne...uppin again...hit me bak

btw please drop an honest vote on flow verse v. Define trying to finish this battle been up for a while thanks

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just like the smilie says . . . can u spit . . . or u just gonna make me laff

Voted For: Tha 1 An Onlii B

both weren't all that good........ but that's why you're not elite yet....... not all of onlii's were punches, but ryda's punches were so weak, i'd give it to onlii

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

my poetry:
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onlii: better flow, but flow still wasn't perfect..... okay punches, but a little self-glorification mixed in

Ryda:bad flow, but not too much worse than onlii's........... okay punches but not as nice as onlii's

overall: both need elevation........ this battle was like who made the least mistake's instead of who was the better MC.......... try to join an elevation crew.....

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

my poetry:
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