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Old 09-07-05, 09:56 AM   #31
Vaskez
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Voted For: Deranged

u a pussy...a puppy with his tail between his leg,house or in street
this dude's shook at me..in front me..on his knees...beggin for no beef^^
^^heh, ok
retarded MC's startin to bleed from when I stab ur neck n turn it blue
and ur mind's phased..cuz in ur profile....you still reppin 2 crews
^^meh, weak
and to top it off...you a faggot..eatin cocks n tastin..what is this?
tied up with more buea's(bows) than Playstation's at christmas
^^simple but okish
i ain't steppin to you..u already squashed up..n seein it lighter
& ur profile's right in ways...cuz your bio is being a rider (writer)
^^stretched IMO, so kinda weak
u leave the personals in the blue..for me to leave u pissin n puke
this shit's like your own name..cuz you'll end up missin a W
^^nice personal
I luv troublin you cuz if there's a gang for those afraid to bust,u elite
n ur aim's bein real...cuz your spits cuase tons of choas n put us to sleep*
^^not too bad
this site's a fiesta for hot cliques...but ur crew ain't show for the party
n that crew of herbs better start that movement already..& leave RV
^^ok
vanquish outta here...but in the game..u unseen at the bottom height
& ur due(dew) to disappear like a wodden porch on autumn nights
^^kinda badly worded but ok concept

also man, you need to work on making it flow more smoothly, a lot of your lines were too stretched

vs.

this guy gon talk shit like he a NATURAL
i'll have his face re arrenged,call me the animal
^^nah non-witty threat
i'll load my glock...step up front...and blast his head
cuz this gon be the last time this nigga goes 2 bed
^^*yawn* talking about gun threats on the web - sorry man, this straight labels you a newb

everytime they post who has the wackest skillz they put the blame on you.
shit im lyrically gift u just paranoid..............so muthafuck wat ya gon do...
^^1st line ok, 2nd line is wack - don't question...diss!
nigga u deranged.............kk yea man thats true
u think you gon win but tell people stop lyin to you..
^^weak
ill demolish this fool he dissolve so quick...
quicker than ur girl was SUCKIN on my DICK!
^^ wack
this is a KO lyrical knockout the crowd roarin
where is ur god now?!?!?!...just another MC im floorin...
^^nah, wack self glory (self glory only works if it's funny and witty)
ill break this fool i was taght to never aim...
so ima grab this fool beat him to death...bash his brain
^^nah, threats also only work if they're funny and witty, this is just a waste of space
my be a classic ur brain took too much damage its dented
you aint got no fuckin skills ur fuckin herb ur generic ur skillz is rented.
^^well at least you're dissing him here, but nothing original, so it's weak.

no hate, you're just new that's all, battle some easier people to elevate first

deranged wins easily
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Old 09-07-05, 01:02 PM   #32
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Old 09-07-05, 01:06 PM   #33
Katastrofe
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good open cuzzo {u a pussy...a puppy with his tail between his leg,house or in street
this dude's shook at me..in front me..on his knees...beggin for no beef^^} and u were nice the whole way thoo...good shit main. Thoo I dont like tha way u ended it
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Old 09-07-05, 05:41 PM   #34
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man whatever i know fasho i aint no herb you fuckin lil shits hahaha

lookin all hard shit u just joined...

uppin........
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Old 09-07-05, 07:53 PM   #35
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Old 09-08-05, 08:10 AM   #36
Mad Dog
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Voted For: Deranged

shodown verse

this guy gon talk shit like he a NATURAL
i'll have his face re arrenged,call me the animal
^ meh opener wordplay on his name but self-g kinda

i'll load my glock...step up front...and blast his head
cuz this gon be the last time this nigga goes 2 bed
^ not feelin it not a punch...meh bar

everytime they post who has the wackest skillz they put the blame on you.
shit im lyrically gift u just paranoid..............so muthafuck wat ya gon do...
^ na not feelin again...too self glorified

nigga u deranged.............kk yea man thats true
u think you gon win but tell people stop lyin to you..
^ hmm again needs work IMO

ill demolish this fool he dissolve so quick...
quicker than ur girl was SUCKIN on my DICK!
^ played...na...to me that says you prematurely cum...shoulda thought that bar out better

this is a KO lyrical knockout the crowd roarin
where is ur god now?!?!?!...just another MC im floorin...
^ meh...more self-glory

ill break this fool i was taght to never aim...
so ima grab this fool beat him to death...bash his brain
^ na again not feeling punch/diss isn't strong at all

my be a classic ur brain took too much damage its dented
you aint got no fuckin skills ur fuckin herb ur generic ur skillz is rented.
^ OMG...finally he drops an aight bar...more like that...i'm not saying it's great but thats the approach you need in these battles

derranged verse

Quote:
Originally Posted by shodown
kk peace out!!!!!!

ill be waitin

all fun no real shit huh?!?!?!?!

cuz i aint into beefin on the net?!~?


u a pussy...a puppy with his tail between his leg,house or in street
this dude's shook at me..in front me..on his knees...beggin for no beef^^
^ quote helped this personal hit...good researching

retarded MC's startin to bleed from when I stab ur neck n turn it blue
and ur mind's phased..cuz in ur profile....you still reppin 2 crews
^ aight bar i guess he ain't in a crew no more lol

and to top it off...you a faggot..eatin cocks n tastin..what is this?
tied up with more buea's(bows) than Playstation's at christmas
^ aight bar ok punch good diss

i ain't steppin to you..u already squashed up..n seein it lighter
& ur profile's right in ways...cuz your bio is being a rider (writer)
^ ok personal...

u leave the personals in the blue..for me to leave u pissin n puke
this shit's like your own name..cuz you'll end up missin a W
^ W&L bars are kinda played but aight i guess

I luv troublin you cuz if there's a gang for those afraid to bust,u elite
n ur aim's bein real...cuz your spits cuase tons of choas n put us to sleep*
^ not feelin this bar

this site's a fiesta for hot cliques...but ur crew ain't show for the party
n that crew of herbs better start that movement already..& leave RV
^ meh ok i guess

vanquish outta here...but in the game..u unseen at the bottom height
& ur due(dew) to disappear like a wodden porch on autumn nights
^ nice closer good bar

Overall
shodown...work on it is all i can say ya text flow was aight...but everything else was extremely meh about it only your closer was considered a reasonabley good diss but other than that i think u'd only win if this was a self-glorification match...coz you had mad amounts of that in your verse.

Derranged aight verse 1st time peeping you u's ok...you're deffo more elevated than sho but you could still do wit some work...keep it up though both

V/Derranged...shodown...keep droppin though u'll elevate wit time
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Old 09-08-05, 10:26 AM   #37
Young_law
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Voted For: Deranged

both verses wereight but derangeswas betta he had him in every category so this vote goes to deranged
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Old 09-08-05, 02:51 PM   #38
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thx......uppin for one more vote..................
 
Old 09-08-05, 06:11 PM   #39
Deranged
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c'mon....uppin for that one more vote.............
 
Old 09-08-05, 09:48 PM   #40
Deranged
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Old 09-08-05, 09:54 PM   #41
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uppin man WERD


deranged keep it c'mon man WERD!!!!

hahahaha congrats you gave me my 10th lose man WERD!!!!!!!!
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Old 09-09-05, 01:46 PM   #42
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Old 09-09-05, 06:21 PM   #43
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Old 09-09-05, 08:17 PM   #44
Shazz
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Voted For: Deranged

Showdown-
Dude your shit didn’t make sense at all, hard to read and shit it was like my sister was typing it … No offense I don’t know either of you or anything could have been done a lot better, Flow wordplay personals everything keep elevating


Deranged-
I liked your verse it was pretty decent for a spit, Good wordplay and all, easy to read made sense ok personals nothing too much and flow was alright… Could have been better, overall you did ok enough to stretch it out and take the win

V/Deranged

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