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07-04-03, 02:18 AM | #1 | ||
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"Cries"
i never had so much fuckin pain inside damn why u do me so wrong u kept mah name alive omg i miss u, but picture that look on ya face when u was lookin tha other way.. i wish i would die i cant possibly live another day! all i done for u, u gotta come at me wrong an this aint jus lyrics slapped into a song this is mah pain an sorrow commin outta my heart tha heart that bleeds everyday for u, i first heard tha news i didnt know what to say to you.. how could u do such damage to me like that i thought u was special i didnt think u was like that u tore mah heart from my chest stepped right on it smiled at it too guess u havent kept quit honest how u could do this to me and still tell me u love me still act normal and still call me ur lovey?? still hold mah hand still kiss me an hug me?? i cant sleep or eat, breathe another day knowin this said u never give me reason to cry , well now im showin it i didnt think this would ever happen how u kept this from me? said u would tell me everything but i guess u thought "except this" u leavin me i cant ever accept this..u promised me so much how could u be so cruel, now i dont care bout school, i dont care about music, dont care bout life or livin i wish i could take a knife an give in, stab myself twice and stop livin! im cryin this song out, cryin cuz u special to me but i aint specil to u cant live witout somethings esepcially you.. i stay prayin to God hopin that he'll make things better but i cant get to him cant write him a letter.. I just want things tha way they used to be, if not like that i just wanna be a used to be how could u leave such a big bruise in me? I cried out so much, still cryin while im writtin still as im rappin...we was never fightin, so why did this happen?? i was good to u, i was there for u i cared for you/ guess u felt different hada hurt me badly/ and now i got noone cant turn to daddy/ cuz daddy'll just laugh at me, an moms'll say its ok but it aint ok when ur reason to live jus walked away/ dissed me ,cuz of things i was shy or afriad bout i tursted u more than anyone and now im played out u really made me cry like a baby, but maybe that cryin didnt help me, and u hurting me drove me crazy/ i wish i coould wake up form this nightmare an forget it ever happened/ but i guess Dreams DONT come true, cuz damm forever didnt happened/ |
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07-04-03, 03:49 AM | #2 | ||
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not bad, the rhyme's seemed to get a little forced but you pulled it off, Can't think of anything else to say
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07-04-03, 07:37 PM | #3 | |
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^^^i agree....the rhyme does feel a lil forced......i liked it though because of your emotion.....you stayed focus....and not all poets can do that.....you also had a lil imagery.....this was good
Last edited by Savory : 07-04-03 at 07:40 PM. |
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07-05-03, 01:38 AM | #4 | |
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lines ..
cryin cuz u special to me but i aint specil to u cant live witout somethings esepcially you.. ^ i liked the way those lines floweed, it was a lil rough on the outside, btu the emotion was felt, its one of those things u just get off ur chest, im sure if u went back n reviesed it could be sumthin real nice, it was pretty good thou respect |
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07-05-03, 06:15 AM | #5 | |
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Raw...
... emotions were raw...one could feel what you were saying most definetly... ..though delivered in an at times rigid and simplistic way...it didn't matter...cos to me thios seemed more like a venting piece of sorts...just letting rip onto paper/screen... ...enough said.. ..resp... |
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07-07-03, 01:06 AM | #6 | ||
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good looks ya'll yea its when mah love left me :/
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