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Wrote this piece today to track 10 ovbiously lol...


trackrunner? Imma a track star..jesse owens of the game
lapping rap stars yall all actors,time to step on set
luv the east but my be hood up in the west
play the game like chess, make strategic moves
or get checked mate.. thats how we roll on dudes
ya see them rolling thru, but they aint coming back
grim reaper of the game, ya I'm running that
peep my attire, its chuck taylor's an white tees
gotta a hundred hoes but hip-hops my wifey
see, she likes me, and I like her back,
never cheat on my bitch our love stays intact
yea, I lay these rap,just to pave the way
fluid like flow, gotta keep hydrate...
at my rate, longs as there's beats going,
jace gon' keep flowing, yall take shots,
i'm on point free throwing ,
flow heat like d wade and Z morning I be zoning,
on cali's finest a lil sticky icky..
makes a nigga mindless, I get picky picky
when it comes to dimes and green
its always been cream... eva since the 90's ,
not like these new rap dreams i've been griding..
jus that long to get my stacks strong
hero like flow, its all act-ion... do it to the max-um
I aint backin-off... betta quit acting soft
or somethings, blasting-off.
other than these lyrics,potato over a muzzle,
you won't ever hear it. no one can hear ur troubles
what's left ya spirit? I'll take that too..
Fatality! jace just Shaing 'sunned' you...

errg.....lacked any lyrical capability...very basic and and didn't hold my interest past the first few lines, no offense just come original....Id love to read something I haven't seen a million times just under different alias.

stay up.

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it came nice and smooth when i read it....it was basic though...no complexity or punches had some wordplay and multis thats it though.......but this probably isn't your best anyways......~1~ keep writing....

Good looks on the feedback... I think I'm going to record this to show everyone kind of how I would flow it... I understand its not very complex but it goes really well with the beat I wrote it to. still uppin for feed.

it read nice to tha beat I was listenin to but you did use basic lines even tho I do it sometime threw a couple multi's into it man shit would sound better and be better

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over all i liked it b....i felt ya flow on it

basic or no basic aslong as the you carry the beat and da beat doesnt carry you...mission accomplished ya herd...good shit keep it up

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Good looks man.

YO HONESTLY FUCK WHAT THEY WAS SAYING...
I thought it flow good man word up......
creativeness wasnt to impressive but you kept it going...
not that many punchline but you had a couple attemp's....
i feel like you can def get better man for-real just keep writing...

ya flow good... work on punches and metaphores word...

7.5 outta 10 not bad man....




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cnt chu ever say anythin nice...all dis bullshit be cummin out but u aint good urself boy

do i need to kick your ass again?

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lmao...nigga when u got me last time i jus started...now is different...while i was gone i was actually doin shit instead of bein an internet gangster