checkinn in yo..............

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Runnin To The Ropes, While The Crowd Yells And Cheers
I'm Platinum....But The Closest You Have To Go T...
....Would Be Growing A Beard!!
Bring Out The Chair To Dispose Of Your Weak Feelings
Cause The Only Fan Base You Have...
....Is The One Hanging From Your Ceiling!!
Get Up, So I Throw The Trashcan To Knock You Out With
Yea Your Leaving Your Mark.....
....And So Do Your Fans After Throwing Up At Your Outfit!!
It's Too E Zee For Me To Put You Through A Table, It Stings
So Can You Hear Me Now?....
....Cause Even Verizon Couldn't See You In The Ring!!
You Want Jack, Hammer's Ready To Get You Some
Trying To Become Chair Of The Company....
....But I'll Just Make You Run Into One!!

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Cheers and yells you hear while im wrecking ya face
Rv's full of Thugs,
..............that mainly keep Tech in their waste
You a biter, I seen that line about the ceiling yo
And why do I need Comp? Tech,
............I swore I passed this about a year ago
Skills killed. this verse will leave you more dead
Sure he'll walk off with belt,
.........................marks across his forehead
Fall back nut, once I have you bleeding to death
Peeps heard Tech would have a Big Show,
........................look-alike being the ref
Damn all the stairs?no just what I beat him with
Shit yo ya Techs Killz me,
.........................Since I hate reading it
Step in the ring, applause, and get popped quick
Now groupies are giving you ass since,
....................you finally lost da Hotshh!
Arm in the stands asking where are the meds at
What you thinking, bash you with a camera
......across ya brain to see wheres ya head at


Fuck It Yo It Should Of Been A Simpilar Battle
That Ceiling Line Is Played
Comp Tech, Computer Technology Is A Class
Tech Skillz, Text Kills
He Lost To Hotshh!

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Tech Skillz
Runnin To The Ropes, While The Crowd Yells And Cheers
I'm Platinum But The Closest You Have To Go T Would Be Growing A Beard!!
Eh, not feeling this punch.
Bring Out The Chair To Dispose Of Your Weak Feelings
Cause The Only Fan Base You Have Is The One Hanging From Your Ceiling!!
Jin has used this concept before. No creativity points, sorry.
Get Up, So I Throw The Trashcan To Knock You Out With
Yea Your Leaving Your Mark And So Do Your Fans After Throwing Up At Your Outfit!!
Haha, not bad.
It's Too E Zee For Me To Put You Through A Table, It Stings
So Can You Hear Me Now? Cause Even Verizon Couldn't See You In The Ring!!
Eh, ok.
You Want Jack, Hammer's Ready To Get You Some
Trying To Become Chair Of The Company But I'll Just Make You Run Into One!!
Nah, not hitting that great here.

Overall, you've elevated since I last read your stuff. Still some room to improve. Personals and punches need some minor tweeking, and just some better concepts. Just work on more original stuff.

Too Eazy
Cheers and yells you hear while im wrecking ya face
Rv's full of Thugs, that mainly keep Tech in their waste
Eh, not really feeling this.
You a biter, I seen that line about the ceiling yo
And why do I need Comp? Tech I swore I passed this about a year ago
Ok, but where is your weapons?
Skills killed. this verse will leave you more dead
Sure he'll walk off with belt marks across his forehead
Nah, not feeling this.
Fall back nut, once I have you bleeding to death
Peeps heard Tech would have a Big Show look-alike being the ref
Not feeling this punch either
Damn all the stairs?no just what I beat him with
Shit yo ya Techs Killz me Since I hate reading it
Didn't word it right.
Step in the ring, applause, and get popped quick
Now groupies are giving you ass since you finally lost da Hotshh!
Said he had hot stuff? Nah. (And a lot of people lose to hotshh)
Arm in the stands asking where are the meds at
What you thinking, bash you with a camera
No.

Overall, you didn't follow the rules if I'm correct. Not a strong verse anyway. Weak punches, weak concepts and personals, need to work on better concepts.

v- Tech Skillz

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thanks for the vote rev...............

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