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Old 09-17-05, 11:25 AM   #1
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soul?uest vs. Drama Queen

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Topic: Helping Hands


* If you think that one of the pieces in this battle should go into the Pieces of Inspiration thread then please state which piece in your vote. *


I remade this thread because I'm a dumbass. Both opponents are checked in...At least I moved the real thread into a closed section this time --- even if it wasn't ours. (Re-)Post your verse.
 
Old 09-17-05, 11:35 AM   #2
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Helping Hands

A mysterious silhouette
On the corner of the street
Naked in the blistering cold
Hidden in the dim dark
A stranger by night

Rags wrapped around his flesh
Rotten teeth flashed
In a smile
While his heart bleeds
Deep inside
A loner by day

He wanders, ponders and wonders
On this wonderful planet
That we are fucking up
No more compassion or love
Only hatred and egoïsm
Can you blame him
For wanting to be
By himself

Wherever you go
There is no one
No friendly words
No helping hands
You're on your own
Always
From the day you're born
Till the day you die

No matter how bad life gets, don't expect any helping hands
To catch you or pick you up whenever you fall down...hard...


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Old 09-17-05, 02:12 PM   #3
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sorry i couldnt get in here in time DQ. had a major tournament on another site and im in the semifinals. had a show last night. it was either use the time to write for my tourny piece or this one...sorry.
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Old 09-17-05, 02:15 PM   #4
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Old 09-17-05, 06:27 PM   #5
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Soul, you have until tomorrow to drop.
 
Old 09-17-05, 11:00 PM   #6
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early morning sunshine pierces
the gasps as the frozen interior
of the apartment cages us…
shivering in fear of
being found out by her mother,
i rest my eyes and hope that covers
do just that if she enters the room.
the knock comes, but not on the door…
her hand falls from the bed and
awakens the rest of her as
it spills her midnight snack
of milk and cookies.
her bloodshot eyes turn to mine
and we connect on more
levels than just one.
Sie habe blau Augen
und kurzes, braun Haar.
and i love running my fingers
through it like playing
in the sands of time.
her lips reaching pleasantly
to my face…
begging for a kiss…
planted and the seed of
a sexual adventure grew,
spreading down her chest
and over her belly…
kissing the pearl as she
opens like new flower…
Lesen sie Herz an kennt
das sie ist mein.
she caresses my head as
these lips penetrate to her core…
knowing her deeper than she
can know herself sometimes,
she pulls me into her aroma and
lets me taste her passion.
the dreams of this were much uglier,
ive never believed in perfection
until this morning.
Ich habe nicht kommt mag
diese in meine leben.
its only because you helped
me taste the truth of our love,
smell the reality of this affair,
and hear the perfection
in the scared silence of your
mid-morning household.
thanks for the hand.

[for interpretations of the german parts just ask, if you really wanna know, otherwise, just try to assume you might know and read it again...make your own ideas.]
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Old 09-18-05, 01:03 AM   #7
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so there is a winner,

i vote drama queen purely because i enjoyed her piece a lot more, i think she addressed the topic given a little better and her piece to me had the more emotion and feeling to it. both flowed well and all, i liked the whole incorporation of the german parts on soul?uest's piece, but i think that his lacked a little, and to me it seems rushed. in my opinion soul?uest's piece just has the feel that it was only done to avoid a no-show and i think it cud've been better. props cuz it was still an aight piece, but i just felt that drama queen's drop had a bit more depth to it, and didn't seem as bland.

V/ - Drama Queen


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