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10-24-05, 06:12 PM | #1 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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Hell On Earth
IP: FAF1 251D
Closely with my peers wandering the streets at night
Suddenly an outburst exploding street the sky turns egg white Arising from below creatures of satan have spawned Running for their lives my peers were suddenly gone Watching in aw no further movements in my body These creatures arising from the ground were the opposite of godly Oddily watching hell take over the lonely streets of detroit Creatures hazing people, but im untouched i feel a sense of exploit Invinsibly froze standing in an odd pose as hell takes over Operation has been taken as an exorcism of god its now over Unfrozen in the instant as i take shelter to be un hurt Quickly swarmed with hells demons screaming with outburst Not believing the circumstances i am given a quick pinch to the skin As i begin to revolt for i will not stand to see hell win People start gathering surrounding me with help Being battered and beatin by these demons nothing but pain is felt Seeing this is going nowhere i retriet for safety on my LIFE Pondering about my future no distinctive plans to survive Looking up to see demons and the master demon in the flesh WithOut thinking I ask him whats the cause for this infest Answering with no thought well whats your sudden interest Fearing for my life no response in return as the demons lead the way Needing my soul for the extinction of god Thinking i will not live to see another day Why is god not helping if he is about to be put to rest Being irrational Satan lashes out, asking why i ask...no response at his request Ready for extinction as im raised above the contraption Hearing yelling in the backround but my mind is now lacking The screaming gets louder as i open my eyes to see this devias kon But opening my eyes not seeing the devil..but worse...its my mom! Links To Come http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204846 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204195
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10-24-05, 07:38 PM | #2 | |||||
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IP: FAF1 251D
upping upping for feed for feed
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10-24-05, 09:48 PM | #3 | ||||
Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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IP: A95E 6328
very emotional drop man, the ending was very suprising, imagery was good also, flow and structure were pretty good also, keep it up man
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i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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10-24-05, 10:13 PM | #4 | |||||
A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 2029 97B3
this was a quite decent piece man,you had nice imagery which is very important,you had okay emotion could of been stronger,the concept is semi played but still cool,u also had a average vocab for this piece...stay up man-decent shit
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Crhyme Sindicate
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10-25-05, 01:06 PM | #5 | ||||
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IP: 31C2 62EB
Word this was a pretty decent drop...your vocab and wordplay was pretty decent , good imagery and nice feelings ...it could have been alittle better..but it was good,Overall this was a pretty good drop... but it could have been alittle better ..keep it up
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The Competition
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10-26-05, 03:15 PM | #6 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 710A C2C5
thankz fo the feed uppin
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10-28-05, 11:49 PM | #7 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 263D 220C
uppin......./////
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10-29-05, 04:24 AM | #8 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 2981 6AF9
i still want to battle u but for real this shit is tightr i no how to give respect this is good shit
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10-29-05, 06:04 AM | #9 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
The worlds were still, heartless and fill with darkness
No creatures living the features unforgiving no smartness No streams to blend not even a team of men the place empty A disgrace simply to exist in this form just a brisk storm of wimpy Mass floating and promoting nothing good time for a godly session No law imperial just raw material waiting to be shaped for manly profession No strategy or aggression and that bought a battery of questions To god after an odd grave storm god gave it form with blessings |
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10-29-05, 01:23 PM | #10 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 263D 220C
ok nice nice.....uppin...
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