I'm new at this. Just tell me waht ya think. I like constructive criticism, so if u need to rip me a new one.

Even if you are anebriated
You better stop me now dog before I start hatin'
When I'm spittin' these rhymes you can't catch me
Standin' ova there like a black Joe Pesci
Queer, Homo, Bitch ass Fag
Your just like ya motha all you do is nag
Your not even on the same pedestal as me
Just wait and see who's the better mc
I'll take out my 12 gauge
and take out all my rage
Leave you in a stage of blood and gore
Tell your mother to come getcha' off the floor
But I don't want nothin' to do with that dirty ass whore
Ambulance pick you up and sayin we got a D.O.A.
Another guy sayin' you need clinic aid
"Cause I never liked you and I never will
And that's why I shot you on the ground so you can lay still.


It's kinda corny but i just came up with it.

Peace out

WOT THA FUKKS A D.O.A

it ain't bad, I can tell you that shiz ain't corny

D.O.A. = dean on arivial i presume. yeh it ain't bad. keep it up