this shit is new to me so tell me wat ya think

ya'll sit down an strap on ya seat belts im spittin ryhmes faster than a fat man munchin on a tuna melt
welcome to my reality, so wat if it contains beastiality, ya'll cant judge i know ya pack fudge
i gave ya mamma a poke, in return she gimmie a line of coke, i thought fuck it shoved it up her ass cos tha bitch thought i was daz!
This is da Red Ledge i iz harder than a diamond of brazil i bet ya'll screamin awww he aint got shit on Drul Hill!
u know wat? i really dont give a fuck ya'll dont know me, mutha fuckers just blow me!

same bullshit dude......
drugs, girls, mom shit, gay shit, played out metas (very few metas)

spit about REAL shit...
and most importantly try your best to be original...

just some helpful info.

peace

you fucked up wit tuna melt...lol.....

you gotta think harder or freak ya lines like instead of:
"ya'll sit down an strap on ya seat belts im spittin ryhmes faster than a fat man munchin on a tuna melt"

strap-on-belts, i release fast like gas when the heat-is-felt..
weak niggas get delt cause i devoure shit like meat equals health


thats^ pretty much everything you said but werded different.....
just think more add werd play

dont put in what comes in yur head first, think bout what yur putting, put it down study it.....then make changes, just like bella said.

aight home boy look rap bout stuff you would neva rap bout not drugs and dumbs shit like dat thats wackas a bitch first of all your ends should rhymes with your middle word

example:
you skills need help or to be shown the way<(middle word),
they will never evole so they need to be thrown away<(end word)//

see you should also make your bars two line instead of one its easier to read aight remember use bigger word creat punchlines use multis you do know what they are right and make sure you ahve word play and metas aight pm me and ill explain therest holla