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topic:ya find out ya grl cheatin on ya describe wat ya feelin n wat ya gon do
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~*ArEs*~ has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-23-04 08:12 PM.

4Blood2Hound0 has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-23-04 11:14 PM.

First time i've been in a topical battle.. just to let you know

Havin rough times, definitly nothin thats in this world could save me,
I was sure we surely would never end up like that girl and Shady,
Questioned your loyalty cuz Troy and me fuckin heard you ain't, see,
Cuz of that I came home on time, cuz i wasn't stayin out early lately,
Walked into the bedrom, and removed was your trusted disguise,
Never woulda guess I'da walked in and seen you fuckin a guy,
Everything you said was nothin but lies, so while I stand by the door,
I'll reminisce on all the times and wonder if i should put my hand on the 4,
I loved you... From the bottom of my heart, you cut me deep,
While I go downstairs and start to remove that trusty sheath,
I don't know how to explain my feelings now, but I will when,
Im done writin this note and I can't write no with this ink pen,
Im thinkin of the future, and damn what I been thinkin is awful,
When I should be thinkin bout the present, now wheres my gun run off to?

And yeah.. I am crazy.. lol

[CENTER]iight man found out my grl cheatin....
now that nigga got a prollem cuz he gon get a beatin...
see i got demonds runnin threw my mind sayin kill dat nigga...
so i pull out da glock n start pullin the trigga....

see she told me she loved but thats sum bull shyt....
she jus wanted money now sum otha dude hittin da clit...
well i got shells hittin his dome from tha chrome...
blastin away his memories like sylvester stalone*....

so i walk ta my grls house n thier they r....
tryin ta fuck but it wont happin...
blastin clips threw the crib makin sure evry1 feel the clappin...[CENTER/]

* in rocky his head got all messed up from boxin

yo i think dis was a close one, it culd go either way really-but i go wit blood cause of the beter punch lines he had. it wasnt really a great battle and lik i said culdhave gone either way.

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Voted For: 4Blood2Hound0

ok sries very basic vacab needs work flow and structure ok visuale not there and that hurt you bad a 4/10
4bloodhound good flow and structure vocab is decent good visuale here as well funny ass ender also i liked your story you used to suck youve really elevated good shit here a 6/10
visuales win topicals and 4blood gave a much better story and easy to see description

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Voted For: 4Blood2Hound0

iight man found out my grl cheatin....
now that nigga got a prollem cuz he gon get a beatin...
see i got demonds runnin threw my mind sayin kill dat nigga...
so i pull out da glock n start pullin the trigga....
^^^^^^^^^ AT DIS PART WAS KINDA WEAK U HAD EMOTIONS BUT THE WORDS WAS KINDA WEAK FAM


see she told me she loved but thats sum bull shyt....
she jus wanted money now sum otha dude hittin da clit...
well i got shells hittin his dome from tha chrome...
blastin away his memories like sylvester stalone*....
^^^^^^^^^^^^ OK GOOD META'Z AND FEELIGNS AND EMOTIONS



so i walk ta my grls house n thier they r....
tryin ta fuck but it wont happin...
blastin clips threw the crib makin sure evry1 feel the clappin
^^^^^^^^^6 OK CLOSA NICE EMOTIONS TO END IT




ARES- U HAD AN GOOD EMOTIONAL DA FEELINGS BUT DA CREATIVITY AND THE IMAGINARY WASNT GOOD ELEVATE ON THEM TOPICALS HOMIE








Havin rough times, definitly nothin thats in this world could save me,
I was sure we surely would never end up like that girl and Shady,
Questioned your loyalty cuz Troy and me fuckin heard you ain't, see,
Cuz of that I came home on time, cuz i wasn't stayin out early lately,
Walked into the bedrom, and removed was your trusted disguise,
Never woulda guess I'da walked in and seen you fuckin a guy,
Everything you said was nothin but lies, so while I stand by the door,
I'll reminisce on all the times and wonder if i should put my hand on the 4,
I loved you... From the bottom of my heart, you cut me deep,
While I go downstairs and start to remove that trusty sheath,
I don't know how to explain my feelings now, but I will when,
Im done writin this note and I can't write no with this ink pen,
Im thinkin of the future, and damn what I been thinkin is awful,
When I should be thinkin bout the present, now wheres my gun run off to?
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIIIIIGHT U HAD EMOTIONS AND FEELINGS DEFINITELY GOOD CREATIVITY AND IMAGINARY

HOUND- U HAD AN GOOD VERSE I SENSE CHA FEELIGNS AND CHA EMOTIONS U GOT FLOW BUT ELEVATE ON DEM VOCAB MAYNE

OVERALL= HOUND GETS MY VOTE CAUSE OF FLOW AND GOOD STRONGLY EMOTIONS AND CREATIVITY


ARES- U DIDNT HAD AN GOOD FLWO WHICH GOT HOUND THE VOTE BUT IT WAS BECAUSE U DIDNT HAD NO CREATIVITY OR IMAGINARY MAYNE.......U GOTS TO GO DEEP

PEACE

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THE SLEEP & THE DREAM-

SEE THAT EMPIRE WERD~!

P.S.A

COMING SOON-GODS BETRAYL
OUT NOW-THE SLEEP & THE DREAM

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