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check 1 2 check 1 2 are ya listening...goodluck to flow this gonna be ill.........

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Checkity check.. good luck to my boy hells fire.. you elevated a ton.. definately gonna be a dope battle

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wrong timing



eyes rise with horizon looking back at her eyes when
she cries dry heavon puking back at her thighs when
facial moves to form a call for her doctor fernandez
gracial muse i roam a dial for her hector messages
7 a day passes still no hear of mom and her accident
24 a day masses a no great to mom and i am absent

i do this as a compliment as i home to see home age
she does well resident as a pink slip is on her dorm fridge
says she could fall at any second i look at cane and mention
u a pimp now mom ya gettin better this shit no sweater
she gimp now mom ya eatin better kiss hit when greet her
tears flood eyes instant i hate hospitol yet she persistant
mirrors good eyes confident she my vital yet she miss pet
she says dont worry i cant help to cry vissions of her die
i remember immature immages and tensions and the why
such a good person mental now in a position of the critical
icu in mood watchin metal screen now oxidation of technical
her eyes weep for her children 5:30 in the morning pleases listen
dad says deep for her condition 6:30 in the morning hearts glisten
sister buckels under a pressure of metric tons and mom moans
brother knuckes under a measure of medic bones and mom unknowns
gods playin chess with mothers spiritual whos winning no visual
fams painin mess with mothers ritual fam room killing no directional
fear pain sorrow the thought of a day with out child grandmother
gear wain borrow the glought of a way with out mild stand mother
faith hope and direction watchin biology with moms disection
wraith ghost and deflection watchin hermoaging and inspection
doctors machine says the worst next day dad prepares for herse
doctores medicine stays the worst next day mad snares for curse
she goes mayo by siren of ways the lady harpes the end of days
she knows stay by firen of maze the nurse secures mend on face
there a week maybe two the news chances what st mary not knew
seen a geek maybe two put bruise chances where hail mary is dew
time with mother vital for the mental survival of the victim who
home by assprin advil for the gental rivival of the victim anew
blood that has become thin where blood hopefully will not thickin
good that has come within where good respectfull will no sickin

a angel over her shoulder maybe the one i saw god in that manger
she came over in stranger to be un done i saw god in that danger
she nursing the home in the view by the bay talkin and not say
she eating the foam in pre view to the way chair n hand she say
i love you and i missed you so after work i tell her a few
i love you and i missed you so wrong timing ill never do

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Wow very good from both of you here... i deffintly should have entered this shit...

Emotion: Both of you had very good emotion in your pieces... each was different and very well put together but i am going to have to give this catagory to flow due to his emotion just drawing me in more and it seemed that his emotion was deeper and more felt...

Imagery: Once again a very close catagory but im going to have to give this to flow aswell due to his being more well constructed and his imagery was simply amazing and just painted the picture of the story as i was reading it throughout my mind... very good both of you

Structure: Both had very good structre and evened out lines... but i liked the way that flow wrote his piece and centered it... it just looked better to me

Creativity: This is a tie... both of you had different approaches to the topic and was two different views on things... very good work both of you with the way you chose what to write about

Vocabulary: Both of you guys had some good vocabulary but nothign was really outstanding and had me reaching for a dictionary... so with that said i would have to say this is a tie aswell due to the fact that both of you guys hd good vocab but nothing really that great

Overall Vote: My vote goes to flow for his emotion aswell as his amazing imagery... this was a very good battle and very close even though flow took all the catagorys other then the ones that was tied... it was still a very close battle and would be glad to battle either of you in a topical or poetry battle anytime you guys want...

props to both of you guys very nice pieces..

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dont forget to pay me whore

when is the next VE commin up cause you know im ready to take the title

thanks for voting.... more please ?

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Nice pieces from both of you. FI I just was taken aback by yours. I wish we had given more lines because I think it would have been a much better piece if you had more room. Hells Fire, I really liked yours as well. Good job by both of you.

i read both and OMG Flow your imagery was very, very good... the best i seen on this site yet, since i'm not in the league i can't vote.. but i say props to you and hell's fire.. outstanding pieces.. good luck

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ok i was just informed that i can vote by the tourney leaders.. aight well, here's my critique..

Emotion: i say Flow took this catergory by the way he worded his lines, they drawn attention to me easily, and i didn't get bored with his story because the way he introduced new concepts and fields to the story, very impressive i must say. Hell's Fire you had emotion in your piece as well but i feel like you were more concentrated on flow in your lines than expresses emotion throughout your topic. -Flow

Imagery: this wasn't hard to pick, i would say Flow took this because he was very descriptive, the more adjectives you use the better, and it still infact depends on the way you word your sentence, emotion and imagery fell into place perfectly in Flow's piece. I can picture all that he had written and that's what you strive for in a topical battle. Flow

Structure:Flow>> the centered stanzas even lines for each portion... Flow

Vocabulary: I'd say Hell's Fire had better use of vocabulary. Hell's Fire

Creativity: Both i was feeling Flow's view point a lot, but Hell's Fire was just as interesting.. so nobody gets this one. Both

Overall: I say Flow took this by a more related-topic.. meaning he has a piece that more people can relate to and i was feeling his imagery more than anything else put forth in the battle.. it keeps readers interested and it never got off topic, i thought it was pretty close to flawless, i didn't expect either of you to do so well on this topic. Hell's Fire i was feeling the fact that you came with an uncommon viewpoint because i expected you to go "all-out" with your imagery but you didn't and i was expecting that since you picked something harder to relate to. I was feeling your flow as well as Flow Intel's.. i think both of you did pretty well for a championship battle. However, the winner of this battle would be Flow Intelligent. Good Luck to both competitors.


Vóâ€-ë = Flow Intelligent

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wow, ive read a few topical verses but none are as good as these.

hellz fire- nice verse dawg. your imagery was good, but some more detail would have been appreciated. your emotion was aight, but i couldnt find a ton in it. your vocab was better, but that doesnt mean a lot to me. overall, i enjoyed your verse but it just wasnt as complex as fi's.

fi- wow man, this verse is amazing. the details, the flow, the story, it just all blends so well. the vocab use is perfect for the story, but your closer could have been worded better to tie with the topic. overall, you won this on the story and complexity.

v: FI

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I dont know if I can vote on this, but oh well...

Emotion- I felt flow took this part of the battle. I felt he came just a lil bit stronger. His sensory details linked well with the topic, and I could sense the emotion in his verse. HF, you had a lil bit emotion in yo verse as well, but I felt that you focused too much on your vocab and flow instead of this, so I couldve give you this part of the battle.

creativity- I dont really know who took this part. I'm leaning a lil towards flow in this one, but I dunno. Both had some nice creative lines, and such, so I dunno. I didn't really see a lot of played concepts, which is what I was really looking for in this category, so this will go to no one.

structure-I'ma hafto give this one to flow because I felt his verse was a lil more easier to read, and that says alot in any kind of text battle. He structure his verse well. No one really had stretched lines, but I gave him this part because he took a lil more time out and made his verse look a lil better and easier to read. His verse was also at good quality. So, I gave this part to flow, and also, just by looking at both verse, one would get the impression that Flow would take this part of the battle anyway, so big ups to flow on this part.


imagintion-I also think Flow took this part of the battle too. I understood flow's verse more, and I could paint a picture in my mind of what's going on. I didin't get bored easily with his verse, and he kept me at suspense and made me want to keep reading. HF, you came a lil hard in this category in some parts of your verse, but i didn't see alot of consistency, so I'ma give this part up to flow.


vocabulary-Indeed, HF is a lil more skilled in this part. I think it's pretty obvious that he came harder with vocab and used them at the right time. Instead of stating obvious words, he changed em up to make his verse seem a lil more sophisticated, and that tied into rhymiing also.

overall- I think I'ma hafto give my vote up to FI. I think his overall verse was better. HF lacked in too many things in this battle to get the win. FI took this one in my opinion. Throughout the whole battle, he came with great consistency and stuck to the topic just a lil bit harder, and he made his verse more interesting.


v-Flow Intelligent