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01-16-07, 03:30 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Eye of a Warrior
IP: 2DA9 8083
well if yall dont know by now, Ima deployed US Soldier.....alot of people are kinda blind to what really goes on over here....and if figured id write about it and i did in the open mic lounge...... then i kinda transformed to a song......
this is just one of the almost daily scenarios that goes on......some of the termanology u wont get......so ill break it down here mic quality kinda sucks aight.....but im makin it work flak vest - to civilians it would be a bullet proof vest (sorta) k-pod - protective helmet eye-pro - eye protection m4- pssshh duuh thats a weapon round in the chamber - loaded bullet d-bag - that big green bag yall always see a soldier carryin on tv apache - type of helicopter i think thats most of the ones that might seem unfamiliar holla links followin http://www.soundclick.com/util/getp...id=4871548&q=hi |
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01-16-07, 03:32 PM | #2 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 2DA9 8083
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01-16-07, 11:07 PM | #3 | |||||||
DaTrus Is A Bitch!
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IP: 28D3 6AD2
This beat is grimmy and I definitly like it..
Your flow has nice transitions and flow..reminds me of some LiL Wayne shit...definitly feeling this...your lyrics are pretty well put together with right hitting multiples.. The flow throughout this whole song is well put together and I'm definitly feeling this. The second verse in the middle section had some choppy sections but besides that, no probs.. Hot song, and this is definitly some LiL Wayne shit, with more meaning.. Keep dropping some hot shit, and collab with me sometime. Stay up |
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01-17-07, 03:33 AM | #4 | ||||
New to RV
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IP: D02F C76E
flawless breath control is a highlight here. a little better mic/mixing would make this cd quality. one of the better soldier tracks ive heard. the very end is nice also, good fade out.
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01-17-07, 05:26 PM | #5 | ||||
~Spitten Fire~
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IP: 2E2A ED07
first thing i noticed was flow.....and ya lyrics go well with the concept of the track......breath control is nasty when u go in a faster flow i neva hear ya breathe...nice shit man.........only thing i can critique is to up ya quality.....aiite man keep droppen......
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01-19-07, 08:31 PM | #7 | |||
Flyweight
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IP: 7474 6CC6
yerr this shits crack...nice breath control, good voice, easy flow, beats bangin
you already know what i think about ya lyrics...so thats a given, just the quality thats holdin it back, overall got some skill mos def...have you finished this are you gonna add a hook...just seems shorter than i thought it would be when i read it...anyway dope fam ...peace |
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01-21-07, 09:45 AM | #8 | |||||||
I'm Talented.Period.
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IP: 40C2 F668
voice def. lacks emotion...sorta like Paranoid...like...blah-zay
flow isn't bad...delivery jus needs more spark Beat is cool not a bad soundin track dawg 1 |
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01-21-07, 11:06 AM | #9 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 2DA9 8083
thanx everyone a bunch
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01-21-07, 01:13 PM | #10 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: F13F 4833
immmmmmmmmmma hatttttttttttttttterrrrrrrrr...................
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01-21-07, 01:15 PM | #11 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: F13F 4833
stillllllllllllll hatttttttttinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
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01-21-07, 04:00 PM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: F13F 4833
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01-21-07, 04:01 PM | #13 | ||||||
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fuck you cunt .. youre all Garbo * 10
IP: F13F 4833
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01-24-07, 08:15 AM | #14 | |||||||
The Most Feared Gang!
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IP: 822A 3D44
Listenin...
beat is good..yeah flow is decent...I like youre multis, not as confident as yet..shit is nice..shit cud get rowdy..adlibs nice..youre voice is a lil like zone but u got multis nice good vocab range and it flows straight gd track fammo
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01-26-07, 04:51 PM | #15 | |||||
The Paragraph President
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IP: 1F19 D2B9
the beat is dope, ya flow is pretty good yup. Your emotion lacks though on a heavy beat like this man. lyrics are kinda easy and simple but meh. Ya voice is pretty dope man I like it. you just need to deliver ya shit stronger cause you def have the voice for it man. overall decent track it's just the emotion you lack duke. rtf on my track "some people" 1
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