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04-27-04, 08:40 PM | #1 | |||||
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Im tryin to elevate
IP: 7BE2 A0A1
let me no what you think.
give me some pointers on how to do better. ya fuckas betta back-out cause i got that 42 on me like Jerry Stackhouse/ lil niggas get used more than pipes in a crackhouse/ no lights up stairs givin nigga mental black-outz/ yall can't stand me... yall just bitchin like Eli Manning/ my boyk.hitch will pull-out N get ya voice squeaky like the Nanny's/ theres no fuckin reason...im so concited, betta start heatin/ hittin ya wit punches like Roy Jones...now ya face starts bleedin/ damn yall lost life...i toss rights...fightin all night/ u wit the Head of authoritys always on they Boss pipe/ listen dawg im startin runnin N gunnin/ me flopin is like Michael Jackson sleepin wit a woman/ no hugs..pop slugs, Rich.P is cuttin up ya throat mane/ we so dope......they should call us cocaine/ gimme feedback
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04-27-04, 08:55 PM | #2 | |||||
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IP: 4289 77F4
can anybody can anybody help me out here.
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04-27-04, 10:30 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: DE75 C55E
Well...overall it wasn't that great of a drop..but it has potential.
Some lines were funny...(The Michael Jackson line)..others had good flow (The multis at the beginning) All I can say is keep elevating and keep writing. Peace
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04-28-04, 03:03 PM | #4 | |||||
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IP: C1DA C961
tnanx.
keep em comin.
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