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02-04-05, 05:45 PM | #1 | |
-Not On My Level-
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Love/Confusion/Forgiveness
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Love What is this im feeling, is it love or more Im not sure if im ready, to walk through that door Somethings not right, Im starting not to care This is messed up, it aint fair I do love her but im not sure if she feels the same I think she hates me, and im startin to feel the same I give up, I don't wana play this game I guess love is both a gift and a curse I still cant believe she broke up with me first Is there still a chance for me and you I hope so, I really do love you Confusion Im confused, I thought we broke up a while ago On the same day of our date, when you were a no show But that was no excuse for me to do what i did I am not sure I wanted our relationship to end I wana be more, I don't wana be your friend I know its over, forward youve moved But Im stuck in the past, Im confused Forgiveness Baby, I wana say Im sorry for everything You know its true, For you I'll do anything I tried seeing other people, It's not for me Im for real, your the only person for me It's like a piece of me is gone, no where to be found Since you left me my life has gone no where but down I love you, i miss you, I need you Please allow me to make it up to you Im gonna get on the floor and plead Please, forgive me Last edited by Life : 02-05-05 at 01:58 PM. |
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02-04-05, 06:58 PM | #2 | |
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upping for positive feedback...............
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02-05-05, 01:04 PM | #3 | |
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upping..................
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02-05-05, 01:57 PM | #4 | |
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upping............
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02-07-05, 05:08 PM | #5 | |
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upping............
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02-08-05, 04:55 PM | #6 | |
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upping..............
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02-11-05, 04:50 PM | #7 | |
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upping.................
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02-12-05, 11:43 AM | #8 | |
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uppin//////////////////////
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02-12-05, 12:45 PM | #9 | ||
Banned: Cheating
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IP:
some great writing, all of us can relate too
flowed well, just improve ur vocab a lil bit |
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02-13-05, 12:49 PM | #10 | |
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^^^thanks.uppin
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02-13-05, 02:04 PM | #11 | |
**the council**
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IP:
i think it was pretty good how you divided it into paragraphs and used a different feeling for each.....each feeling was described quite well would have been great if you had come more complex with the vocab that would be somethin to work on overall though....7/10
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02-14-05, 02:28 PM | #12 | |
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thanks. uppin/////////////
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02-15-05, 05:31 PM | #13 | |
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uppin///////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
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02-17-05, 04:18 PM | #14 | |
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uppin............................................. .
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02-18-05, 05:16 PM | #15 | ||
Banned: Cheating
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it'z sum good shit u wrote i felt it cuz like mc iggy say we've all went thru it keep up the good work & i like the overall quality fo sho
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