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11-11-08, 05:50 PM
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STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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Hustler Book 1
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11-11-08, 06:18 PM
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'the alarm buzzed nosily'
I suggest you don't continue a damn thing until you make sure nothing has any spelling errors or doesn't make sense.. or you can just put the whole shit together, call it a rough draft, and throw it at somebody and pay them cash to have them do it good luck with your book but I'm not interested..
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11-11-08, 06:33 PM
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calis cred = zero. his talent as a writer = zero. so, basically he's as good at those, as he is at audio. word.
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11-11-08, 07:10 PM
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^^ im guessing he's not your bestest friend in the whole wide world, is he? lmao
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11-11-08, 07:23 PM
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well phenom is gay and i believe all homos should burn in hell so hes mad because he doesnt want to be in the fire and brimstone but he cant stop sucking dick cuz he likes the taste and he cant stop wearing pink panties cuz he likes how they feel and he cant stop getting fucked in the ass because he loves his boyfriend so he is mad............................................
anyways the book is checked for spelling errors and its ready for publishing in january.this is a sample for people to check out before the book comes out.
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11-11-08, 08:59 PM
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In general it is pretty good. Obviously the spelling errors will be checked before publication. For me though, the way you describe everything is pretty bland.
Just one example to give you an idea: Quote:
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It's slightly longer, but it sets the scene and gives it a bit more of an atmosphere.
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11-11-08, 09:48 PM
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ahahaha, fletcher just took your own book and fucking ripped that shit
he should just re-write your whole book and put it out in stores lmao
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11-11-08, 09:50 PM
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no he took a urban ficition book and made it too intelligent.you have to understand your audience.thats why young jezzy goes platinum and canibus goes wood.the audience who reads urban ficition are mostly ghetto people with lack of education or educated people curious about how people in the ghetto think.
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11-12-08, 03:13 AM
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11-12-08, 10:05 AM
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Skadoosh!
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How is that too intelligent?
I wasn't trying to hate or anything, but if you add in a bit more descriptive writing to make the whole shit have a bit more depth, imagery and atmosphere then you will appeal to a larger scale of readers. If you think your way will appeal to the specific audience you are targeting then do you and props for that. 
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11-12-08, 10:55 AM
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Don't sweat it Nick..
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11-13-08, 04:13 PM
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In ya area.
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Haha, you're great.
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11-12-08, 01:08 PM
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Yeah and nick, your attention to detail started out nicely but quickly fell off. You couldn't rewrite his whole book but you'd be a nice addition to it I'm sure lmfao
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11-12-08, 01:47 PM
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rofl, it wasn't even meant to be anything special.. just a point to show that it could be improved. I beasted that in like 5 minutes. Given enough time I could rewrite his book. But that would be to a way I like it. I am sure if you rewrote it, then it would be to a way you liked. And the way CALI has wrote it is to the way he likes. Its all difference of opinion, but if he's already got it lined up with some publisher then his way has apparently appealed to some people.
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11-12-08, 01:28 PM
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Hope this goes well for you. Let me know when it gets published. Where is it gonna be published?
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