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Topic= Scattered Pieces

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aight i felt both peices lacked... but no hate to either of you...

George- overall a fair peice... not a huge fan of the structure... vocab was good... stayed on topic... overall a pretty good poem

King- good peice... ya had good structure, lower ya font a little tho man... ummmm... vocab wasnt all that hot tho and thats what lost if for ya i think... no hate dawg...

Vote- George

I felt George more on this one no hate tho. I just felt that his poetry was speakin to me more and I could understand it clearly like these three lines right here.to keep me from fulfilling
building a foundation
based on listening to my heart

v/george

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http://community.rapverse.com/showb...918915&posted=1

more scattered things that will scatter the scatters thats there that line was dope as fuck king had a real emotional powerfull piece here it had dope metas in it and flowed as a poem should his poem said so much while only having to say so little i was really feeling his shit.
george good drop but the visual was not as good as kings was the better vocab didnt hid that even though it sounded nice i really expected more from you but this wasnt a good visual and the lines just aint express the topic how you shouldve.

this is a major upset but i gotta be fair
vote-king dipet

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aiight heres my breakdown:

king_dipset:

i was suprised by your verse i didnt know you had ppoetry whatsoever... so that teaches me to judge a book by its cover but anyways... i like how you came about with the poem.. but i got lost a couple times... i felt like certain things didnt belong there and certain things needed to be added... your imagery was decent not much imagery but i wasnt expecting it with a topic like this... emotion wasnt good.. i felt with a topic like this you could have got so deep with it... and your vocabulary really lacked in areas... thats my biggest complaint with your verse otherwise it was pretty good

overall : 7.4/10

george k. stanza:

amazing verse... every piece of poetry i read from you gets better and better... it's like there's no end to your elevation and skills. Basically your wordplay and emotion shined through-out this entire piece. Every line was descriptive and had depth it wasnt ordinary or basic or like anything i would normally read which made it that much better. your structure was also good could have been a bit better but overall it was good.. mainly your emotion got you this win and how you pieced everything together and stayed more consistant than king dispet

overall : 8.7/10

vote : george k. stanza

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Vote: Dipset:
yo dis shit was a unpredicted upset in my opinion..........King dipset came strong wid a deep ass poem

GKStanza
-topic coverage was not very good i dont feel, id say 70% on topic and the rest was sort of floating around it
-good vocab used it well and in the right places where it was needed
-structure on point
-flow, it flowed nicely-imagery: u didnt really create much imagery in a lot fo your lines.try for more of this
-emotion: alot of emotion in this piece,, on point
-best bars:
by gaining that empty feeling
because trust is one commodity
that's lost beneath the stealing
revealing all you thought to be
^^dope

-overall-8.5/10

King Dipset
-topic coverage: id say 95% of ur drop was on topic, so well done, u barely fell off at all
-very good vocab, shows a lot of elevation in you aswell, - liked the repitition of scatters in your piece made it more emphatic
-structure was uneven..try and work n this
-flow-ur verse flowed really well, thats why i didnt criticise ur structure 4 being uneven as despite that it stll flowed well
-imagery: a lot of vivid imagery created by the description in ur lines
-emotion:decent...try and work more, the 1st half of ur drop was really emotional it then declined from there
-best bars:
Scattered Pieces Of life, Scattered Pieces of Death
My Scattered Pieces Of Birth, Are the only scattered pieces thats Left
As I Look Upon The Broken pieces of my Self pride
And Notice Only Disrespect and Hate That Noone can Hide
^^dope

-overall-9/10 well done..drop like dis nxt week man

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George took this...

George....much more complex verse...smooth read...good vocab and internals...emotion was ok...imagry..ok

Thought King came average....nothing noteworthy...some of your metas were bad...flow was choppy...internals and metas were ok...voab was basic...no imagry..emotion was ok

Vote= George