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jamie | 0 | 0% | |
The-Marvel-Arm | 2 | 100.00% | |
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02-06-04, 05:19 AM | #1 | |
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jamie VS The-Marvel-Arm
IP: A81A 8749
10 - 16 lines
Usual Votin Rulez no hata's no d/r no crew Constructive critism only Must spit as soon as you check in, must check in today. Im checking in now..... |
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02-06-04, 05:32 AM | #2 | |
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this fool marvel-arm, hes just a fuckin lightweight hes da cat us niggas love to hate muthafuks 26, he should have a job but he just to lazy and he acts like a nob look at his name , it puts him to shame WHO THE FUCK AM I im the fool whos gunna make you cry just step down gimme the crown you aint shit in this world of rap im a pop a slug in ur ass and make u snap well gota go, i ned my ounce of crack |
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02-06-04, 05:38 AM | #3 | |
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Ok Ok Check this:
He's a student taking a beating as his course, But how can you beat me without your magic torch. Jamie your slip sliding and your only 17, So baby why you crying? its the point to be mean? Why'd you be an MC, getting hurt in the process, You couldnt remember the cheers and didnt fit ya dress. Why ya mouf open, are you catching flies? Im battlin a plant that even bee's pass by. You Goofy mutha fucker but you aint no dawg, When princesses kiss you you turn back to a frog. 10 lines He's a student Jamie and the Magic torch TV cartoon He's only 17 yrs |
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02-06-04, 06:01 AM | #4 | |
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vote= marvel arm
no offense Jamie but his verse just came off harder way better structure n wordplay, I enjoyed it more peAce 2 both Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Feeble Minded
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02-06-04, 06:33 AM | #5 | |
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02-06-04, 06:39 AM | #6 |
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jamie vs. The-Marvel-Arm
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[B]Flow[/B] - Marvel-Arm had decent flow and strucutre, which
Jamie's seriously lacked. Punches- Marvel-Arm also took him here. While his punches were played and kinda weak, they were enough to do the job. Jamie attempted to use punches but they were too simple and were very weak. Personals- Due to the fact that Jamie had no personals, Marvel- Arm gets it.He Had two personal, although weak, about J's age and that he's a student. Vocab-Nothing special here pretty basic from both [B]Creativity[/B]- Not much creativity in this one, but I'd have to say that Marvel came more creative. Overall- No much of a battle. Jamie needs to seriously work on using punches and personals. As well as his vocab and structure. Marvel-Arm had decent flow and structure, but needs to be a little more creative in his vocab and punches. I can't officially vote, but If I could I would have to vote: Marvel- Arm Vote on these fuckin' battles: apathy vs. Gravity apathy vs. jamie |
02-06-04, 06:51 AM | #7 |
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My reply
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I didn't want to post again but, the links I included with my feedback on
the battle are fucked up. These battles really need to get voted on, Sorry Thanks & Peace. apathy vs. gravity apathy vs. jamie |
02-06-04, 06:54 AM | #8 | |
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Vote: marvel
Much better verse all round...actually threw meaningful punches.....flow was flawless and structure was there Hit up the topical battle in the link http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112266 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Feeble Minded |
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02-06-04, 07:34 AM | #9 | |
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this fool marvel-arm, hes just a fuckin lightweight
hes da cat us niggas love to hate ok your rhyme schem starts ok.. the set seemed like it would have been dope but lacked a punch muthafuks 26, he should have a job but he just to lazy and he acts like a nob basicline, had filler ish in it to much look at his name , it puts him to shame WHO THE FUCK AM I filler type ish im the fool whos gunna make you cry just step down to much boasting about ones self.. talk more about him gimme the crown you aint shit in this world of rap follow through had basic punch, but way lacking stength im a pop a slug in ur ass and make u snap well gota go, i ned my ounce of crack crack kills the mind, keep away from it. Filler type ish lines.. and you needed more of a punch not bad for three days, lol.. Over all i would say work on yourpunchlines, diss your opponent, make fun of them.. after that try for wittyness you know metaphors and wordplay and such.. Keep up the practice though kid, dontlet cats get you down He's a student taking a beating as his course, But how can you beat me without your magic torch. eh alright opening.. nt much of a punch though really lacked strength Jamie your slip sliding and your only 17, So baby why you crying? its the point to be mean? o thought yourset up was going some were but it sort of fell off.. Not much of a hard punch, directed in a since Why'd you be an MC, getting hurt in the process, You couldnt remember the cheers and didnt fit ya dress. wtf?! Evil had a bar in his rhyme that sounded liek this one to.. in a since, his played off Jamie being a cheerleader... Plus he used a line that sounded like one of mine from Cypher.. Hmm i dunno sounds like he MAYBE have a POSSIBILITIE of biting.. Or an accident.. either or punch was weak to Why ya mouf open, are you catching flies? Im battlin a plant that even bee's pass by. weak punchline, you could have upped a little on the content and went for a slightly diffrent approach You Goofy mutha fucker but you aint no dawg, When princesses kiss you you turn back to a frog. eh.. this line is alright.. not really diggin it though could have been more... Over all this battle seemed one sided, Marel had just been at it longer.. Over all a newbie ish type battle.. M you had some decent punchs but need to build up there strength, and then work on your metaphors.. vote-The marvel Arm http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112456
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02-06-04, 12:04 PM | #10 | |
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hey marvel arm biatch why dont u go reply to our battle from 2 months ago you answered my callout and ducked that aint kool, its closed now i can have some one open it if u dont wanna be a girl.. ?? i even PMd u about it
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