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09-17-05, 10:25 AM | #1 | ||
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this yo 1st look at da nu money of chi-town
I got 4 toasters wit round scopes put ur life on a downward slope you fall down da hill jill while i hustle ur water to a well like dope niggas gonna snitch til my wanted poster makes me famous yall battle kats is just hemroids, better known as anus shit, my flamers torch yo ribs / call 'em a forman grill if norman will, then nu is gonna get u like the psycho i am pussy boy ran, pretendin to be bob marley screamin ''MY GUN JUST JAMMED'' I know yo type fan...I understand i'll have u damned as sadam gotta chill 'cause i'll robb ya shield and ignite dis beef like smoked ham u choked man, hopped on stage and fell like a drunk broadway actor im higher class, flyin past and u aint in my circle like broken protractors my flows da main factor but dis nine is another reason your leavin an da punches leave kids gums hurtin like when they was ''teathin'' lookin like chrome spinnerz 'cause da steel stay close to da wheel i'll peel ya melon now you tellin everybody not to bullshit on da real teathin=when babies teeth are just startin 2 grow
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^^U Lil MotherFuckaz Aint Spittin Like Dis^^ Last edited by Nu-Money : 09-17-05 at 02:28 PM. Reason: edited now to not in da last bar |
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09-17-05, 12:09 PM | #2 | ||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP:
well............... flow iz........... okay and was actually pretty good, but would be better without the filler words (like in the last line when u said now twice).......... fix your structure and flow will follow........ not a bad piece though...... sorta reminds me of Havoc off of Mobb Deep.......... overall 7/10.......... step it up a little, and there may be a spot for u on TTI........ get 3 wins and tryout.........
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09-17-05, 12:09 PM | #3 | ||
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IP:
yo when r yall gonna ''critique'' my freestyle
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-The Triggers Like Cryptonite, I Got Gunz n I'm Grippin Em Tight...Equiped Witta Pipe...Got A Infra-Red & A Infa-Blue...When I Mix Dis Light It Look Like A Tree Wit Bright Christmas Lights, Look Like The Bloods 'n Crips In A Fight...It'll Snipe Ya Light Bulb n Dim Yo' Life-
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09-17-05, 12:11 PM | #4 | ||
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IP:
yo thanx chip i appreciate dat hommie
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-The Triggers Like Cryptonite, I Got Gunz n I'm Grippin Em Tight...Equiped Witta Pipe...Got A Infra-Red & A Infa-Blue...When I Mix Dis Light It Look Like A Tree Wit Bright Christmas Lights, Look Like The Bloods 'n Crips In A Fight...It'll Snipe Ya Light Bulb n Dim Yo' Life-
^^U Lil MotherFuckaz Aint Spittin Like Dis^^ |
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09-17-05, 01:15 PM | #5 | |
New to RV
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IP:
It was good, you put alot of words in your bars, though. I give it about a 7/10 too.
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09-17-05, 02:28 PM | #6 | ||
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IP:
yo thanx dog where is yall rhymes at link me or somthin and i'll check it out
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-The Triggers Like Cryptonite, I Got Gunz n I'm Grippin Em Tight...Equiped Witta Pipe...Got A Infra-Red & A Infa-Blue...When I Mix Dis Light It Look Like A Tree Wit Bright Christmas Lights, Look Like The Bloods 'n Crips In A Fight...It'll Snipe Ya Light Bulb n Dim Yo' Life-
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09-17-05, 09:20 PM | #7 | ||
Sam Dope
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IP:
Wackness. Leave the site.
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09-18-05, 01:21 PM | #8 | ||
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IP:
Dis nigga is actin like he actually wants a ass whoopin
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-The Triggers Like Cryptonite, I Got Gunz n I'm Grippin Em Tight...Equiped Witta Pipe...Got A Infra-Red & A Infa-Blue...When I Mix Dis Light It Look Like A Tree Wit Bright Christmas Lights, Look Like The Bloods 'n Crips In A Fight...It'll Snipe Ya Light Bulb n Dim Yo' Life-
^^U Lil MotherFuckaz Aint Spittin Like Dis^^ |
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09-21-05, 09:29 PM | #9 | ||
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IP:
Flow Was Straight... Lyrics Good For A Keystyle... I Would Like To See You Write Someshit And Take Some Time On It I Think It Would Be Real Good... Anyways Good Drop Man Keepin Uppin Ya Skills
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09-22-05, 08:39 AM | #10 | ||
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IP:
Yo Thanx Devin I Juz Noticed U Have A Freestyle I'll Check Dat Now Dog!!!
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-The Triggers Like Cryptonite, I Got Gunz n I'm Grippin Em Tight...Equiped Witta Pipe...Got A Infra-Red & A Infa-Blue...When I Mix Dis Light It Look Like A Tree Wit Bright Christmas Lights, Look Like The Bloods 'n Crips In A Fight...It'll Snipe Ya Light Bulb n Dim Yo' Life-
^^U Lil MotherFuckaz Aint Spittin Like Dis^^ |
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09-22-05, 09:40 AM | #11 | ||
Addicted
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IP:
wow @ your ego... structure was wack, lines way too long.. vocab was average.. multies lacked, rhyme scheme was basic.. and gun talk is played, you are an e-thug.. please, next time u try tell sum1 they suck at audio... atleast make sure ur average atleast in text.... back in my RM days when i owned in text and was classed as one of the best at open mic... so yea, keep practicing
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