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Its entitled Never Forget Me

Same song.. just re done
Holla at me with some more feedback

links.
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...stpost&t=238304
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...stpost&t=238291

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R.I.P. Bodie

yo fam I told you about this joint fam..

emotion was hot b..delivery on point..got ya shit across..that bit from the belly of the beast on was dope...flow was hot..lyrics is real..my nig in the buildin..keep doing ya shit fam

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....suck a dick faggot.....

beat is aight....the thing i notice the most is ur delivery i dunno....i think u need to annunciate more.....flows coo....lyrics is coo....dubs needa be lowered...u need sum compresson in ur vox and eq that shit cuz shit sounds all over the place ...overall this was coo keep doin u man word

beats weak, your vocals sound like u just sat them on the beat.... flow is ok, too many times i hear stretching syllables so the line can fit, then you have moments where the flow sounds pretty nice... delivery is ok abit monotonous at times(lacks tonal changes e.t.c) n a tad forced at times too, lyrics are ok, but again as ive said with you before they become predictable because they lack variation in rhyme scheme n shit like that, and i agree theres still words that you arent annunciating properly at all..... also you just sound like every other rapper out there, you should create your own style to0 make you stand out. peace.

beat sounds like something from Rocky...real inspirational


is this ur verse? I thought it was the hook until you kept going

Quality is decent at best

flow is not hittin here...u don't own this beat at all

ambitious...but u lacked confidence on this one



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Word.....shit was hard man. I told you that the other day.


Ya'll could have got the exclusive to this last Thursday on the radio show


Tune in next week to see what I get my hands on [/radioshowplug]

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^this isnt that track that was on the radio.

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My bad.....you said it would automatically play, so i never looked to see which song was playing.....lol


Shit's not playing for me right now though, so I'll come back and leave some feed

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Beat:I liked the beat.the quality is iffy..cuz the drums aint kik'n like it should an the snares are low..but im likin tha beat.

Flow: got a gutter flow..sumwhat needs more energy in ur vocal points..but still u did coo..

Lyrics:the hooks was hit'n pretty good..ur lyrics now,question if that my kid line was pretty solid..but crackin like window line was not..u just came at point from a block perspective..I feel ur shit cuz u had sum emotion in ur swagger..but u couldve sat back an invest'd more time into the structure of your verses,but thats from a listeners point of view..not my artistic side(lol.)..but imma give u props on it only for one reason I still nod'd my head to it..so Id bump it a bit.

props.

thanks
I plan on re spittin it with more emotion when I get the time

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Zone's Season
I liked this track..the beat was fire too. Lyrics was better on this track and flow was on point. Quality could be better but thats besides the point.
Wish it was a bit longer though but It had good elements to be like a skit on your CD fam. lol..dont forget to make a track for the bitches fam...lol..

This track gets a 7/10

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figure I could drop by and promote my my first mixtape and what not since im here..

Word to the bold

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R.I.P. Bodie