"Realest shit ever spoke"

Verse One:

I saw my grandparents yesterday, hopin' it wasnt the last time Id see them,
Before they fall to the will of God, and go to the garden of eden,
I look around and see so much coruption in the world,
From racists to rapists of that 15 year old girl,
U need to get ure priorities str8, its not bout the lambogini with reclinin doors,
Its about helpin our brothers and sisters locked down in wars,
I dont even write my own rhymes, God fuses thru' my brain and Expresses himself on these lines,
So all those that hear this,take it as the word of God, cos its time,
With Intermental like Moses, the truth will set you free in every line,
Let me ask u a question, whats better gettin payed or gettin aids
You gonna die because someone wants to pay you to get laid.

Hook:

All my real motherfuckers know, that this the realest shit I ever wrote,
All my true mutherfuckers know, that this the truest shit I ever spoke,

Verse Two:

Its about quality not quantity, Inter dont give a shit about bling,
People dyin in the world so u look good in youre diamond ring,
Intermental gainin a new alias - "The king of the Hill"
Theres killings in Iraq and a civil war in Brazil,
Don't do anything you aint ready for, so it all gd on the day of judgement,
So basically if u hear this, young girls dont get yourself pregnant,
Yo we all should care about everyone, because its the human race,
Even if they fuckin up bad and disregardin Gods work, like MJ's face,
Yo remember this the truest shit ever written in history,
Make this like your bible, make it obligatory.......

Hook:

All my real motherfuckers know, that this the realest shit I ever wrote,
All my true mutherfuckers know, that this the truest shit I ever spoke,

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ILL..........Real good emotion in ya' flow in the first verse!...second verse wasnt as strong, but the vocab was good in both verse, flow was strong throughout....prefered the first verse, true story type of shit, an you made the concept work well....nice drop dog, one of you';re best fa' sho'....keep 'em comin'..

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thanks man......you my nigga.....

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Thanks Man...........

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2227665

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Forget to post the link

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I liked this, it kept me pretty interested throughout....it was a lil harder to follow in the second verse, but other than that this was a good drop, keep it up

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Thanks.........

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what's the concept? that shit swayed from place to place like light wood!
You should have focused on one concept, cause i still don't know whats the point of this
Don't mean to be hard on you though, the lyrics were real, the flow was on point
but at the end of this read, im left, thinking what was this all about? what's the message?
when your getting on a moral tip kinda verse, you need to leave the reader with a MORAL- a strong one at that....so try writting this over with an aim, and you'll see how this could turn out to be a GREAT piece...deUce..real talk baby. keep droppin

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Man, no matta what they b saying, its a great piece, morals and values showin through, tellin what you see and know, its great 10/10.

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3 nails + 1 cross = 4given
No matter how good you are there's always someone better.
I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be.

shit is hot dawg
keep it up

Yo thanks alot for the feedback......yo J Terror, i made this track with the title "realest shit" its not about one thing, its a freestyle that was on my mind, i explored aids, pregnancies and all that.....I understand what youre sayin and gud lookin out fam

Thanks J Terror, MC Igcy and 2fast2Furious

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what happened to lucas?

i liked this shit.. u touched on some good topics... it woulda been better to stay on just one but regardless it was a good drop.. keep doin ur thing

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