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Old 06-21-05, 09:44 PM   #1
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*death Of A Friendship, A Funeral For Love!*
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Engrossed with her beauty,
And depth of her eyes,
The warmth of her kisses,
Her moans and her sighs.

The I love yous she gave me.
How she felt in my arms.
Her feminine voice,
And how she flaunted her charms.

The touch of her hands,
And the frost in her hair.
The most beautiful creation,
With clothes on or bare.

All this was mine,
But she stole it away.
There is no more us.
'Twas our funeral today!
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Old 06-22-05, 01:27 AM   #2
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damn this was mos definitely ill bra
fuck the ending topped it off for me...
flow was on point, imagery and emotion was there
man this was a really nice piece...10/10 in my eyes
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Old 06-22-05, 07:06 AM   #3
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I really felt this..
Your first stanza set everything up & drew me into the poem more..
I mean the first two stanzas had great emotion portrayed with simple vocabulary..
Which to me, made it very powerful..
I like the whole 2 stories to this piece, if I'm right..
Well thats how I thought of it as; & the ending..
Was tight, nice twist..

Keep dropping..
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Old 06-22-05, 08:36 AM   #4
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Great drop as usual. You've got to be one of the most consistent poets on this site. Everything you drop is and 8 or better. I was feelin this piece. Emotion was there, flow, structure...just R.A.W...9/10

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Old 06-22-05, 04:38 PM   #5
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thanks ya'll, yall r very supportive and im happy to have fans of me on this site, i will write back on all of yalls post. thanks...uppin for more.
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Old 06-22-05, 05:45 PM   #6
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hot shit dawg, very nice
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Old 06-22-05, 05:50 PM   #7
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Yea I'm feelin that piece, you put the emotion into that and it paid off. The ending was great. Well written piece.
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Old 06-22-05, 06:29 PM   #8
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thanks. upin for more.
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