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01-18-05, 07:16 PM
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ACUITY vs DJ EM SCE
IP: 5671 DBDD
CHECK IN BY FRIDAY OR TOPIC WONT BE GIVEN POEMS DUE BY SUNDAY EDIT YOU LINK WITH AT LEAST 2 OTHER POETRY BATTLES IN THE LEAGUE YOU VOTED ON VOTING ENDS WENSDAY AT 12 EASTERN TIME.NO LINE LENGTH AND DONT WRITE A TOPICAL THIS IS A POETRY LEAGUE I WILL DQ YOU IF YOU WRITE A FUCKING TOPICAL I HATE THAT SHIT ITS NOT POETRY
 WINNERS RECIEVE 100,000 R.V SORRY NO SHOWS DONT GET PAIED YOU GOTTA ACTUALLY WIN  GOOD LUCK TO BOTH topic-BAPTISED IN FIRE
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01-18-05, 08:06 PM
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Ask About Me
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IP: 978D E9C8
check..................................i doubt he will check in
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01-19-05, 12:14 PM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: 569E FB77
check in..................
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01-20-05, 12:36 AM
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IP: A9B6 A1B2
BAPTISED IN FIRE=topic....i think...
duh now dont freepost again foo
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my MYSPACE is Better than Yours Last edited by C.A.L.I : 01-20-05 at 04:55 AM. |
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01-21-05, 02:55 AM
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IP: 15CC 072A
babtized in fire
If a man could see past what his eyes could view We would surpass this cruel life filled with subdue We lack the grace of religion and exist in a life of sin When did life begin? When will life choose to end? These thoughts distract us from what our eye’s rarely set focus We live everyday without a care blaspheming the laws of mosses They say we’re put on this earth only to proceed to a better place Only the good shall carry on as the rest stay as a disgrace The scared atheist proclaim that god is merely a delusion If they have no religion why do they preach that god is an illusion? Soon everyone will follow there idol and times will grow worse The gates of hell will open and a demon will amerce The anti-Christ will promise to give you everything you desire Exchange for you soul he will give you all you inquire Now, ashes have been swept away because you where baptized in fire However, the believers of Jesus will proceed to the gates While in the palm of satins hands he holds everyone else’s fates .
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01-23-05, 08:57 PM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: 5211 1EC1
Baptized In Fire ........Hear Me....... Inevitable circumstances, like my life is already wired on God's motherboard My head is dipped in the rages of ancient malevolent narcotic lords Im an embryo,terminally ill, constricted at the neck by poverty's umbilical cord My life is diagnosed to be ill-fated, like at my temple lies the tip of a sword As im engulfed in the fires of old that have ravaged the times of past The blaze spews out of every molecular skin pore, burning through my leg cast Im awake to the fact that life in the ghetto, is like being born into hell Walking around with tormented entities, suffering with pains that holy water cant quell I stand, bathed in the flickering souls of previous lost and tortured generations Driping in their essence, their pain, their emotions, resulting from ghetto confrontations I was born suprised, i saw the light but it was disguised by a false baptize Now my emotions are ruled by despise, emotion that once conjured cannot be revised Baptised in fire, rename the allocated title and theme my ghetto gospel Because life keeps one in the fire and brimstone and people can use my verse as a hostel My life at any moment in this heritical fantasy can spontaneously combust Its like the lord has the lock to happiness, but he let the key disintegrate and rust To the followers and zions he has in many ways broken his unwritten code of trust In Christ's name for centuries they have died, many feel their baptism injust The screams of grief, murder and temptaion, fail to be surpassed by the god's angelic choir Because in this world, itis impossible for a human being to advance higher As my very foundations are being burned at, my task is futile, i must retire Im doomed to fail,because being born in the ghetto is like being baptized in fire i will do my votes 2moro when i get home form school...~1~
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01-24-05, 05:05 AM
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IP: 5671 DBDD
Ok In My Opion Acuity Got This Ez Better Vocab And Emotion As Well As Better Imagery Dj Had A Good Drop But It Wasnt More Simplistic Then Acuitys And That Hurt Him Badly Here .
Vote-acuity
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01-24-05, 04:32 PM
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ready 4 wuteva
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IP: 840E 41E4
okay this was a great battle poetry wise
vocab- vocab goes to acuity because he used diverse words and nothin i saw was too repetitive structure-this also goes 2 acuity because of that center alignment, it just makes it seem to flow better. i use it alot myself rhyme scheme-both seemed to be basic A B rhyme schemes to me so i think this category isn't critical in this battle intensity/emotion-acuity by far. it explains itself my vote:Acuity
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01-24-05, 10:13 PM
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Middle Weight
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IP: 1EDC 673C
Acuity gets my vote on this, had some real emotion and he let it out in this peom, he stayed on topic and his wordplay and mets4s made it almost able to feel it
good job to both
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01-26-05, 08:05 AM
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IP: 5671 DBDD
acuity wins closed
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