Im Bein analytical,
When I say Bein Original,Is critical,
My life is controlled by all thats biblical,never political,when reachin my pinnacle,
I stay guided by the Testaments,Neva Lead by the Presidents,
When I bleed I never rinse,Cause scars are sins evidence,
Who needs Earth Heaven Has all benefeits,Dont listen to the republican 'elephants',
They Just worried about their salary,Their speaches are at the canopy,of a sinnisters Gallery,
So when they speak I just Wont Listen,Sins already glisten,And Im My own Christian,
Judgement day is here I know The Verdict,Hell is over populated Cause Nobodies perfect,
But if you ask for Jesus to cleanse,and you get accepted just plead for your friends,
This is my Bible I speak it Through Pens..........
Ay this is my first Poetic Scripture Inmy Life.....And In a way Imm startin My own Bible

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yo ur wordplay wass good and the flow was on. also it was some deepshyt. keep writin doggy uno

Thankx Im also Lookin Fo more Replies From People That Know Whut they're talkin about like you Varentao,Dime,ya know...Thankx holla

hmm....interesting piece for sure...had some real depth to it....even though it would be more suited to Open Mic maybe....it was still a nice piece...

...good word play....flowed with a certain 'zig zag' like style to it....(which is good)...i would say a good introduction to the poetic scriptures...(!?!?!)....keep them coming...would like to see more poetic styled pieces though...but its all good....

...respect....

Yo O, that was pretty nice....keep droppin' 'em like that.

eYo Supz,
Sorry i didnt reply earlier ...
havent been able to log on to RB

Tight vocab ...
Keep spittin da realness ...
Powrful poem no doubt!

Pz
~1~

Thanks Uppin I was The Kid HoZ Am I down Fo Round Two In the Poetry Tourney

Still Uppin Fo Criticism.....

Uppin To the Poetic Sleepers.......

STILL UPPIN......

DAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMN YOU UPPIN. anywayz im returning ya the favor on seeing how ya talent been uppd and i gots to say ya have mastered the syntax of the internal and multi rhyme scheme. this was nice. i think more suted for open mic, but i aint hatin. also liked how ya fliped the religion up in this. never knew that side of ya. either way stay up. peace.

joey