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Old 07-13-08, 10:25 PM   #1
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my world unique

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its a place never seen in the world of concreite.
its a dream world that lies just benieth your feet.
hard to see and even hard to live the dream.
its a mission to observe this new world unique.
but still i will race against the encryptions of time.
for the sake of being a human in a world the combines...
every little thing that you love in your own little exsistences.
like lyrics that twisted, and words that are so gifted.
its some vision i saw when i was raw with a vision.
it became so clear in the split second of an instant.
so now i die just to live in a world unique...
but the sad part is... its just benieth my feet....

i wonder if heaven is similar to this planet...
where everything hurts and causes some sort of a damage.
this is more like hell, i can tell, that its the truth....
ive seen it all in the form of pain as a youth.
my world unique, man i wish i was there.
as my finger tips glide across this keyboards stare.
this keyboards stare, man this keyboards there.
this keyboard is here..... wait... this keyboard is where?
so much confusion in this world of "evolution"
intoxicated by rhymes that are sold more then prostitution...
im not abusen of my lyrics im just speaking my mind.
i speak a mind with a mind of its own that unwinds.
you can look at my rhymes and say they suck or there lame.
but truth remains... its about the pleasure that i get from the game.
its not about the money, its just about the love for the music.
in my world unique every body spitten so fluent.

back to the status of this world thats hard to shake.
tryin to tell all the truths from all the lies that are fake.
im so tempted to say, that im lost in a dream....
the dream is still the same.... my world unique.....

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Old 07-13-08, 10:34 PM   #2
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Old 07-15-08, 02:25 PM   #3
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I really liked it. flowed well and I like your imagery.

I'd give it 8/10.
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Old 07-18-08, 03:07 PM   #4
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uppin this shit
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Old 08-04-08, 08:15 PM   #5
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feed some time this year....
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Old 09-02-08, 04:17 PM   #6
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upparonie rat-atuttie
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Old 09-03-08, 04:36 PM   #7
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Scanz it's good to see you still writing, you have improved at lot since
I was last on.

my world unique, man i wish i was there.
as my finger tips glide across this keyboards stare.
this keyboards stare, man this keyboards there.
this keyboard is here..... wait... this keyboard is where?
so much confusion in this world of "evolution"
intoxicated by rhymes that are sold more then prostitution...

^ favorite lines, I like the way your just rhyming now still feels a little
forced at times but a massive improvement for before.
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Old 09-03-08, 08:36 PM   #8
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Yeah i liked this piece man. It most basic at times but it was a good drop dude.
There was a few forced bits inbetween but yeah you are getting better.
Keep working at it.

The lines critic pointed out was dope man.


Could you do me a favour an vote on my battle...

Its the meltdown 1 (wack i know) but plase do .


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Old 10-01-08, 07:11 PM   #9
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uppin the peanut butter
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Old 10-18-08, 04:21 PM   #10
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very good

9/10
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