My first lyrical drop on RapVerse...Let me know what y'all think...
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*she whispers* "Baby, You Know I Love You.."
*I smirk and reply* "...Yeah Baby, I Love You Too..."
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Never Knew When I Met You That Night, It Would Change My Life
Never Knew I’d Stay With You This Long, It Couldn’t Be More Right
You’ve Taught Me So Much, Matter Fact You Know What
I Was Completely Lost, I Was Just About Ready To Fold Up
End My Future & Let Me Be Forgotten In History, But Luckily You Were There
Maybe It Was Meant To Be, When You Were Sent To Me, It Seemed So Rare
Never Have I Had Such A Perfect Thing Shine Upon Me
So Aggressive & Strong… Yet You Came So Calmly
Welcomed From The Beginnin, But Still, I Wasn’t Too Confident
Glorified Every Moment, Always Stared At You In Astonishment
Thought Your Body Was Directly Hand-Crafted From Gods
Confused & Lost When I Found You Were Made By Frauds
But I Did Respect Moms, She Was At Least Helpful & Honest
Pops Though Was An Asshole, With Eyes Despised Upon Us
Looked At Me With Discomfort, Told Me You Would Always Come First
Didn’t Want To See Me Affect You, Thought I Was Just Another Dumb Jerk
But Let’s Get Back To You, I’m Askin You, What I Have To Do
Remember That, I Know I Couldn’t Forget Or Grasp The Truth
The Other Guys In Your Life, They Knew You Much Longer
They Were More Experienced, More Confident… & Even Stronger
I Felt Weak, How Could I Compete, It Wasn’t My Block, It Wasn’t My Street
I Just Wanted To Take Their Spot, & Miraculously Hold You In Their Defeat
But Then, I Started Workin With Them…Or At Least That’s What They Thought
& Still Do, I Have Yet To Be Caught, Except By You, Nothin Could Make You Stop
But Through The Others I Learned A Lot
There Was Even More Trying To Get A Spot
Everyone Wanted A Piece Of You, But Some Could Only Stare
I Remember When I Was One Of Them, Thinkin Life Wasn’t Fair
Then Suddenly, Everything Happened So Fast
You Asked If I'd Take Another Chance.......
I Was Stunned! I Couldn’t Even Feel My Hands!
But I Didn’t Respond Or Nod, Just Smiled Like A Moron
You Took That As A ‘Yes’ & Just Caressed My Fore Arm
Then I Left With My Head In The Sky, Proud To Be Alive
I Knew We Would Get Together, It Was Finally My Time
I Didn’t Even Mind That There Were The Other Guys
Cuz I Realized, You Loved The Way I Rubbed Thighs
You Loved The Way I Felt You Up, Loved The Way I Came Through
But Unfortunately You Didn’t Know It Was All A Lie To Obtain You
You Were Deceived, That Wasn’t The Real Me, I Stole It & Didn’t Pay Due
Got It From Some Other Guys, Come On, I Didn’t Know Any Other Way To
Show You How Much I Needed You In My Worthless Life
Other Guys Gave Up On You, But I Always Had To Fight
Fuck Stayin Sincere, Give Me Credit For Bein Here
Credit For Bein Honest Now, For Actually Comin Clear
Here’s The Truth, I’ve Cheated On You Over Twenty Times, No Lies
But Inside, It Kills Me, The Crimes Through Lies Has To Find Designs
& The Only Meaning I’ve Found Is Fear… I Was Scared You Wouldn’t Accept Me
My Style Was Too Messy, But Cheatin Was The Defense Mechanism That Kept Me
I Wouldn’t Be With You If I Told You Everything & Played It Safe
Every Mistake Paved The Way & Now I Just Can’t Escape My Fate
I’m Truly Sorry About All The Deceiving, I Didn’t Mean To
Just Tellin You Now, So I Don’t Have To When I Leave You…

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Now, Uppin for some feed....

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honestly after reading on eof your battle verse I expected this to be a lot better... it just wasn't very witty... there are no outstnding sections in this or stand alone lines... there's nothing that really pulls me in and makes me feel this... it's not very descriptive as to what's going on... it coulda been a lot more vivid... and considering all of the lines you used it really shoulda been... Just about every rhyme can be predicted... there's nothing really compelling in this... the rhyme scheme is kinda flat... you got your thoughts across but you didn't do it in an entertaining sytle... over all this was aight but it coulda very easily been a blaze piece considering the emotion the topic should envoke... nice try

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Thanks for the honest feed...This was just something I was fuckin around with, Never really did a verse outside of battles b4 this...I'll stick to Front Lines lol

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