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Old 02-02-09, 03:27 PM   #1
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The hottest shit in my City right now.

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Give me some feedback on this. My stage name is Renegade. Rep it all day.
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Old 02-02-09, 04:31 PM   #2
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beat is pretty hot... your singin'-ish delivery on the hook is straight, catchy... the pitch bent voice-over is dope kinda... you got a nice flow, delivery is pretty decent too yo... lyrically it's aight, ain't blowin' me away but it's pretty good... quality is aight, mix could come to life still, but it's clean and clear... not bad yo, keep it up...
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Old 02-02-09, 06:33 PM   #3
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Thanks for the feed uppin for more feed.
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Old 02-02-09, 10:17 PM   #4
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you sounded really bible, haha

I dont know your vioce is too high and soft need to work on delivery, lyrics were weak, mic presence was shakey but the basics are there, just need to polish it up, and write more complex to stand out, but yea I can really see how your bible.
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Okay its feed back not bullshit its funny how its jus you that think that. Oh it was my first mix tape to. but alright then more feed i don't care bout this nigga.
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Old 02-03-09, 12:44 AM   #6
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bro, he was being serious, not hating

it was good feed he gave, give contructive criticism, your delivery and mic presence are blah, you need to work on your delivery and emotion hard bro, you dont stand out on the mic at all, and fix your flow it's hella choppy
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naw me and him don't like each other thats why i don't take his shit. I understand what your sayin and i will work on it but you guys gotta remember that im not T.I. i don't get in the studio wit jus blaze and dj kahled i got a basement studio i do the best wit what i got ya dig. I aint rich yet homie but thanks for the feed!
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I aint got nothing against you, lol and everyone here has a basement studio but they can still deliver a quality track, like jtr said I wasn't hating fact I even said that the basics we there which was being really nice about it.
I'll audio battle you though, as long as I dont have to read your lines.

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ya i no but you still need decent stuff to make the quality track i aint never audio battled on here if you tell me how imma do that pm me or somethin than i willl.
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Old 02-03-09, 05:00 PM   #10
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alright alright sound.
i listen'd to "Fort Wayne Anthem" < or so i deemed it.


1st verse control is off, on the real, your pausing a lot on the flow and sounds like your just reading it ya know.
work on that.

presence is good.
flow is alright, that pausin was killing me.

hooks alright, the double don't sound right by the swag and feel of it's pretty good.

second dude has a hot flow, but he goes off a little and a little loud compared to bea.t

3rd guy, the YUp/Doubles sound kinda off too.

beat is hot, content straight.

work on quality.
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