http://community.rapverse.com/showp...448&postcount=9
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2659760


THEY FUCKIN COMIN FOR YA

www.soundclick.com/jsummers

Beat a mo'fuckas ass to dis shit..

drop a link i'll leave feed
checked

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southbeachmiamiho

up up up....................

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southbeachmiamiho

fuckin up u bitches

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southbeachmiamiho

beat real nice...builds up in the beginning...

i like the vibe to this..pretty good...delivery on that southern/memphis style...coolness..sounds like something on a three six mafia cd......cool type shit

the chorus is cool

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Hello everyone

Ight real tight beat...................


you come in, really good flow on this one man. You fit the perspective of what the first verse should sound like. More emotion though, you were a little too monotone for this track. Good shit, better than what i thought you would bring to the table. Solid drop, not much to say that you should have done better.

Ight, Chorus is pretty coo, once again, emotion is a factor.

Second verse, really elementary type flow. Too much "south side" rhyme scheme, nothing that sets him apart from the regular. Flow was ight, vocab needs to be upped.

Third verse-
Seems to me that you didnt know what you should say. The "I'm coming, I'm coming..." was really not tight.
Second dude sounds a lot better on his sentence structure. Good transition from one to another. Good quality on entire track.

Overall, decent track, lacks the "wow" that a hype track should be. Needs more emotion from both.

7/10

rtf
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=222546

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Grim

Props For Da Feed

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southbeachmiamiho

no prob, just dont forget to rtf.

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Grim

I like how the beat comes in. First thing I notice is how fucking whack your voice sounds on this, this is NOT fight music. Maybe for a kindergaretener or something, but not grown people. You sound wannabe mainstream as shit. WTF, well that feedback was for the first person, if there are two people. the second "person has a little bit better voice but still has the same prollems. The flow was iight though, if that makes your life better. Stop talking that gangsta shit though, nobody believes you. pz

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Soundclick

your first link is invalid and i see that ur on so u have 20 mins to replace it or this is closed

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wannabe gangsta dog.. i aint never say i was gangsta... but i seen whole lot more shit than you ever will you aint gotta clue my mans you and internet rapper.. that shits fake.. i'm a real rapper i'm out doin my thing.. so dont just come in here poppin shit kid...

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southbeachmiamiho

ok first things first
i do agree with whoever said they didnt like ya voice on the beat
i like ya voice, but i think it jus sound a bit odd on this beat
you need a more raspy, real hardcore type voice to really pull off the whole "fight-music" theme on this song...

other than that i thought the track was pretty decent
i loved your flow, on point most of the time, not to mention i thought it was original...which is something i like to see
lyrically you and the other dude was both on the same level

overall it was solid
nice lil track to throw on ya mixtape or suttin
is it album material? i unno...
but pretty solid, keep droppin man

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listenin, beat is hot....youre flow is pretty nice, youre voice is not gr8 on this, lyrics are nice....hook is pretty good...but it seems its missing summin..delivery is pretty good..2nd dude, better voice, flow is good...delivery is aight, decent lyrics....hook is nice u both did it....this was a nice listen, u held it down nice.....n so did yo boi

can u rtf:

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...991#post2662991

feed used 2/19 "Chill Wit' Me"

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www.soundclick.com/dollaback

thank you uppppppppppp

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Beat is tight. Sound quality is pretty tight. Ya delivery is aight, not bad. Lyrics are aight, nothin too good but they serve the purpose of the song. Hook is eh, could use a little work. 2nd cat is aight. Flow could use a little work from both emcees. I wasn't really feelin ya last verse though. Lyrics just weren't that great. Overall an aight track.