in that orange horizon, you can hear thunder in the distance
the storms rushing near, and my heartbeat starts to quicken
there's life in those raindrops, if you stop and listen closely
its music for the mind and the rhythm always leaves me feeling so free

i could sit forever, staring at those rainclouds
wondering what its like to be there on the way down
not knowing for sure, but hoping somewhere there's a heaven
and if it rains the day i die, i couldn't ask for a better ending
pure like a child's eyes, comfort like your own bed
the memory of sunshine, and there's always better days ahead
a steady melody in the raindrops, listening to the downpour
breathing in that freedoms like the rush of a bound horse
its a cycle of renewal, the clouds burst with wisdom
i turn those raindrops to jewels, in my own perfect kingdom
my head fills with visions, i flash back to last fall
afternoon showers and reddened leaves falling on the asphalt
spring flowers in their beds, covered by a blanket of drizzle
stuck gazing at an endless lake as every raindrop has a ripple
sitting at a window, the soft patter is all my cause for peace
as the summer rains, come in waves and wash away the grief
i could sit forever, staring at those rainclouds
knowing exactly what is i have to do to stay proud
the sky is a garden, and i'm a level-headed florist
those raindrops are music, and i'll never stop singing the chorus

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in that orange horizon, you can hear thunder in the distance
the storms rushing near, and my heartbeat starts to quicken
there's life in those raindrops, if you stop and listen closely
its music for the mind and the rhythm always leaves me feeling so free

^this is nice, but you could of left out 'always' and 'feeling'. Just helps it flow a lot better bro.

The rest of this is solid as fuck, its not a topical verse, its more like a verse ready to record.

i like the emotion in it, and the smooth metas. Vocab isnt to extensive, but meh, fuck it. This is good.

Stay dropping.


pz

That was really good. Didn't need crazy vocab. to keep me reading, had good progression to it. Quite a few lines stuck out, that were really sick. But overall it was a killer drop, KEEP IT UP. Barn.

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I liked the closer, an my style always incorporates multi's..so I was diggin the flow. You had some vocab, it fit the flow of the verse. Your imagery was on point, it kept me readin. Overall this was a nice drop. Which are to few an far inbetween in the om forum.

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Fear

that was sick! you should turn it into a song with a dope beat that has rain and thunder rolls. nice imagery! if you make a song i'd collab this is fire homie

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