http://www.soundclick.com/artist/8/...htaim_music.htm

when you hear the beat you'll know why its called what its called..lol...i've improved in a lil bit of everything since my last drop so listen and leave feed
oh and by the way this my first thang i did on Cool Edit Pro

here's my links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203068
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202519

no offense but this is trash man.....no emotion, really no flow at all....is this a joke?, i mean your delivery is horrible, you didnt ride the beat at all....and its gay dental floss, wow

sorry Newbie Method...but this shit probably wont really be that good ta gays knowin that im straight....u suck fuckin dick...fuckin trash...commercial mainstream ass bitch...mike jones probably ur fuckin idol...this aint a joke..u r........oh and sorry i dont ride shit like u

uppin for some real feedback...ya'll know i atleast elevated a lil from my last shit never said i was perfect like this muthafucka's expectation

damn kid, new meth been speaking truth, he aint a hater so he not posting just to piss you off.

he letting you know truth strickly for elevation purpose's. If he licked your ass and said"this is good your good blah blah blha" you would think your doing somthign right.

when on the REAL, this track sucks. everything NM said is true bro. take it as constructive critism.

constructive critism????? "this is gay dental floss"??? "this is trash" that aint fuckin constructive critism thats straight hatin...if it was some real fuckin constructive critism he would say what the fuck i should do and tell me more better not just sayin its fuckin trash i dont expect him ta say it good if it wasnt but he coulda just said "it wasnt that good elevate in ur flow make it end at the snare" or some shit like that..that would be constructive and then i wouldnt be bitchin bout the feedback..jesus christ u people have ta be stupid

I see you had fun with the effects lol

Let me break it down.

Mic presense/delivery: Aight I'ma help you with this.
You seem to keep a mono tone voice through the whole thing.
That bores people.Like have an emotion in every line.
Like throw some powerful pain in your voice.No matter what you're saying.
Your emotion effects the mood of the song.You can say the same shit in a different
way and it'll turn out completly different. But since you had a mono tone voice
it was in the gray.The more emotion the more it effects people.You NEED to effect.

Flow:Keep a steady pace.I need to be able to nod your head to every setup
and punchline.And you went off and on.ON some spots you had it and then it
and then it went right back off again.Just when u get the beat make up a flow right
there and then fill in the blanks.Like this "dadada bop dadadada bop".Like a draft.
Then fill in the blanks with words.Its a tough process but you are improving.

Chorus:Oh make a better chorus lol Microsoft rap meant internet rap right?
Basically when you make a chorus always split it into 3 or 2 things.
Have a chant for the people to remember easily and have something to sum up
the song with.

its real simple once you get deep into it.

You're getting better obviously so keep trying and ignore the big weanies like
new method Take this crit and save it maybe and use it anytime you're lacking
in a specific area.


buhbye

I love you indeph

man straight aim shut the fuck up seriously, ur gettin me frustrated, they only leavin fuckin feedback and ur bitching them back, bitch me back i dont care cuz it was wack seriously, not bcuz i said that ur elevating that its good god fucking dammit

everybody does ysdat...everybody does...and speats you aren't helping you little....person you

im the one helpin him elevating on msn

Speatz....why the fuck u gettin involved if muthafuckas would leave REAL feed like Indeph did then i wouldnt be bitchin cuz indeph said what needed ta be said and not that it was just trash...u want me ta fuckin enter one of ur song threads and say it was nuthin but fuckin trash and not leave any CONSTRUCTIVE feed...oh and by the way didnt leave any fuckin feed

and i love you too indeph dont worry for that

I'm the one elivating him on AIM.Beat that
strait aim my homie G dog for the streetball.