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03-25-03, 09:28 PM | #1 | ||||
Kevin Brown
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Round 1: The Necromancer
IP: 6FA7 7304
Topic: Shadows
Due: Tuesday April 1st. Line max: 16 lines any more will not be counted. The top 15 will advance.
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03-30-03, 05:19 AM | #2 | |||||||
Atra Ludio or Hip-Hop?
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
Shadows
The Shadows in my soul Are the same is the Shadows in my heart They are the monsters that appear everywhere They depart from the light my soul torn apart But I turn the lights out And the shadows do no exist any more No deception no deceit no lies all discreet Every contour of the shadows nothing left to explore They no longer exist If everything is dark No Shadows, no monsters No lies, no deciet Shadows exist only in light So fuck the light bring the darkness But there is something I forgot... ...Shadows are darkness. I'm darkness. |
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03-30-03, 01:30 PM | #3 | ||||
Kevin Brown
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IP: 6FA7 7304
closed until judging.
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04-06-03, 12:44 PM | #4 | ||||||
Guest
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IP: BFE5 28C7
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04-07-03, 11:11 AM | #5 | |||||||
Narcelus Flawless
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IP: C3D0 66BD
i liked this one...it was metaphoric...the ending was beautiful..
vote: goes to next round |
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04-07-03, 12:38 PM | #6 | ||||||
Guest
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IP: 1A2E E198
I wasnt really feelin this piece. no real particular reason it juss didnt do nuttin for me.
sorry dawg not feelin it. |
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04-07-03, 02:17 PM | #7 | |||||||
I Am The Light
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IP: CB2E 7CE0
I wasn't really into this piece for a couple reasons..
1) They depart from the light my soul torn apart No deception no deceit no lies all discreet I feel just these two lines ruined the whole poem- I will also say the rest of the poem does not stay strong-- shouldn't proceed
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SOFT FOCUS crew record (3-0) Wits end ~ DOI ~ Central....now who's next? sacred scriptures record (5-0) |
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04-07-03, 06:16 PM | #8 | ||||||
Guest
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IP: 16CE 0E8C
well it followed the topic .... it was decent... I didn't feel it to much though... Vote doesn't go to next round
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04-08-03, 06:44 AM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: BFE5 28C7
Basically was a strong piece, with some real moments of rawness...you didn't conform to any real structure...but pulled it off wiuth some on the edge writing whihc was executed well..
..and the ending was brilliant, the best ending i've seen so far... Vote: DOES go through to next round. |
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04-12-03, 05:09 PM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: BFE5 28C7
Quote:
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