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Old 02-10-09, 05:53 PM   #1
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yes mam, one life to live, let's get some feed and then drop a LINK and i'll rtf.

hit it up

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=5543354
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Old 02-10-09, 06:42 PM   #2
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Beat is real nice.

You come in with a real laid back flow to it. First thing I notice is that your dubs are off. Sound quality is cool. Everything is pretty clear.

Hook isn't anything special. It works for the song as this isn't meant to be some catchy club song. Kind of reminds of that T.I. and Rihanna song.."live ya life (aye!)" with the whole theme of the song.

Let me hear the whole thing when it's done.
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Old 02-10-09, 06:44 PM   #3
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Old 02-10-09, 08:42 PM   #4
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word, i think you need to turn your dubbs down or pan em...you need a stronger center point, otherwise ME the LISTENER gets lost in the tiny differences in timing...im talking millaseconds BUT I NOTICE IT!! the hook needs to be bigger in dynamics. and lower in volume....it kinda knocked me back some echo on the left and some rich reverb on the right....could mix that hook together pretty nice....those are some minor detail that could help you brush up the track.....
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Old 02-11-09, 02:59 AM   #5
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listening, lyrics pretty good,didnt like the backround on your hook but good concept of song is deep.good drop
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