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Old 01-20-03, 02:22 PM   #1
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"Angel" < some shit i wrote for my girl yo

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iight this aint no rap song or nuttin its just a poem i wrote for my girl iight peep..

"My Angel"
As I look in your eyes an angel appears.
So beautiful, so radiant my eyes are full of tears.
You came into my life, you were sent down from up above.
You're my angel in disquise, tha girl I'll always love.
So beautiful,so precious, I hold you in my heart.
It is only you that holds the key to my heart.
I want you to open it up, but please, never tear it apart.
Your so worth wakin up, an breathing your worth so much.
I live my life with you by my side, and your hand in my touch.
Can't leave you It's never gonna happen not even God can make me. Just tha thought of it alone hurts me greatly.
Your tha sparklin star that lights up my cloudy skies.
Tha most gentle, special, caring person this is true i tell no lies.
Your tha beautiful angel that Heavan is missin.
Your that special one in front of me whenever we kissin.
Your tha one i've been waitin on since day one.
Your every wish is my command, whatever you say hun.
I Love You
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Old 01-20-03, 09:51 PM   #2
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damn man this was the wackest shit i ever read ha ha ha ha
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Old 01-20-03, 11:26 PM   #3
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Lend not your ears to the one who is dubbed 'Barney Rubble'.

Wasn't wack, it was conventional. Wasn't shit, it was untamed. It was direct, kept to the point, almost concise. The words ment one thing, but the emotions that backed them up say another.

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Old 02-13-03, 09:54 PM   #4
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...simple...yet so effective...

....actually couldn't help seeing what Necro wrote, after seeing stupid critique from Mr Rubble...and he said it all really...

i really feel what ya saying for sure...


....respect...
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Old 02-28-03, 02:01 PM   #5
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Yeah i agree with the fact that ur emotions must back up what u writing bit i know where u goin with ur feelins so I feel ya
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Old 02-28-03, 02:02 PM   #6
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Yeah I feel what u sayin but it doesnt back up what u sayin it just says it but i guess its hard to really back that shit up

WhytPAC?
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Old 03-01-03, 05:23 PM   #7
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good looks ya'll
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Old 03-02-03, 12:04 AM   #8
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This shit was deep...I like the meaning behind it dogg.....i feel every word of it....

Deep son, fuck the haters...do ya thang....

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Old 03-15-03, 05:23 AM   #9
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Apostle's right on dogg, that shit is heart felt, no-one can deny yo true feelings man, I'm feelin this shit, keep it up!

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Old 03-15-03, 02:34 PM   #10
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I liked it, good to know there's a man out there that deeply cares for his gurl... sweet

only weak point was the vocab, step it up and it'll be a great emotional peice

Not hatin, i'm jus tryna help
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