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Old 02-18-05, 08:30 PM   #1
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In Love With You...

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In Love With You


I been thinking and I got something to tell you baby
There is something I am starting to feel between you and me
It's like without you a vital part of me is missing
Or is it really you who I am missing
I remember all of the good times, including the kissing
You dont have to tell me, I already know you miss me
I already know you cant take two steps without thinking about me
Well I cant take one minute without remembering you
It was like a way of life, me and you
The way we were, thought we would last forever
I guess forever is short these days,now I am without you forever
Now I just wish to ask what I have wanted to ask you
Why did you leave me when I told you I was in love with you?
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Old 02-18-05, 08:31 PM   #2
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uppin for positive feedback......
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Old 02-19-05, 02:56 PM   #3
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Old 02-20-05, 01:10 AM   #4
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I don't think you put much efort in this drop. I mean it can be way better and expressing love should have super poems. nah mean?

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Old 02-22-05, 03:53 PM   #5
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Old 02-23-05, 10:58 AM   #6
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Old 02-23-05, 11:04 AM   #7
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I didn't really like this one but it was aight.

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Old 03-06-05, 06:57 AM   #8
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I love this drop: it's packed with such pure emotion and I love the concept of it, especially those 2 last lines with the question you ask. You found a good balance with your vocab, structure made it easy to read and I just liked how your story progressed. Good drop!

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Old 03-06-05, 06:26 PM   #9
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honestly, i really liked it
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Old 03-19-05, 03:49 PM   #10
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Old 03-24-05, 09:31 AM   #11
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