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Old 03-17-03, 03:08 PM   #1
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Wink :::::**Barely Above Water**:::::

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This aint a song or nuthin it's just some things I wrote when I was ripped (high) so uh if ya want peep if not holler bacc


How could I...Why should I....put myself in such despair, if the life I live and the situations around me already seem to be unfair.

The questions you ask me may not have answers for another eternity of years but the reasons that you hurt me are consequences for my fears.

Drowing in what seems to be an ocean of stress and dissapointments, I would'nt complain to not even GOD for I fear he might enjoy this.

Barely above water but you would'nt begin to even understand, when I needed you to be there for me you held bacc your helping hand.

Do unto othersas you wantdone unto yourself so most want to be treated like shyt I say this because I'm treated as such but the hypocrits wont admit it.

I'm barely above water I feel like I cant breathe and the anger is choking me out, I'm screaming, kicking, and crying again but no one can hear me shout.

A picture is worth a thousand words while mine is worth a million, I can't explain why I say these things or why I even have these feelings.

My dreams have turned to nightmares that wake me up in cold sweats, I'm 16 years old and these things are frequent so tell me why I should'nt feel threatened.

But in the end I wake up so that's a blessing a little bit larger, but it does'nt even matter when I close my eyes cause I'm still BARELY ABOVE WATER.

thoughts please *~Holler~*
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Old 03-17-03, 03:08 PM   #2
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just uh get at me!!!!
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Old 03-17-03, 05:29 PM   #3
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you third part was the best

"Drowing in what seems to be an ocean of stress and dissapointments, I would'nt complain to not even GOD
for I fear he might enjoy this."

on the seventh part threats rhyme better than
threatened but its alright how you got it

Ths Was Alright For Being High..If You Actually Were

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Old 03-17-03, 07:09 PM   #4
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nice for bein high this was some good quality aight well holla bak good work 1
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Old 03-18-03, 02:00 PM   #5
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Thanx for gettin atcha gurl!!!
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Old 03-18-03, 03:20 PM   #6
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well kidd...it was aiight...i give you the fact that you was high...but some shit moved around...i know cuz ive written shit when i was high...thinkin it was the tightest shit in the world...ha!...nah...but ya flow was simple...ya vocab had its moments...ya structure lacked to keep muah attention at points...

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Old 03-19-03, 09:55 AM   #7
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Old 03-19-03, 11:49 AM   #8
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Old 03-19-03, 05:20 PM   #9
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Peace queen...

lol you know how it go, the dro' get you talking what you truly thinking and you laid it on the line right there...

Ima watch for your pieces ma...

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Old 03-20-03, 10:17 AM   #10
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thnx
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Old 03-31-03, 02:59 AM   #11
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Old 03-31-03, 11:40 AM   #12
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Aye, a fairly good piece..

...i mean these are the kind of thoughts that could be written when not hight, and same goes for the style...

...but cos you were high, they seemed to drift a bit too much sometimes..which at times lost the jist of the piece...if you would, broke some of the 'chains'...

..but overall, i got into this piece fairly well..


...respect...
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Old 04-09-03, 10:58 AM   #13
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thnx uppin
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