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Asking can I help, is there something I can do
thought for just a split second
that his ego's bullet proof::::
He finally snaps upon me saying it's beyond my reach
I sat quietly, listening to fury,
his security has been breached::::
looking into his eyes my soul begans to
ache trying to shake off upcoming tears
that will stream into his lake::::

Now he's talking out of anger and his rage is growing near
the reason that he stands out when he's among his peers::::
regreting that I asked, a question with many of answers
cause it kills me slowly
like a burning cigarette creating the
strongest cancer::::
He said he does'nt trust his family, and he does'nt trust me either
that must have made my eyes burn with sadness
felt like they were splashed with ether::::
So what is a girl like me to do, I gave him no reasons to doubt
I love him to the fullest extent, he know's cause actions are loud::::

Many pressure points upon his back, so I understand why he's mad, but what did I do why don't he trust me I'm confused just like stripes of plaid::::
without trust there is no us, I now think it's just me, all I want is a simple answer and this is all that I plead::::
without trust I have no reason to tell you that I care cause you would'nt believe me anyway so what emotions should I share::::
without trust it's just me still shining in what seems dim light
so tell me why you dont trust me, tell me why I still have to fight::::

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excellent girl..liked everydingle part of it....like your style..keep posting

thnx can I get some mo feedbac please!!!!

I liked this part.....made me just sit and think about how i can relate about what u mean....

...i liked it...nice flow and content...no need for vocab cuz its self explanatory....keep em commin

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OK OK OK baby Bakardi I trust you Ok...and keeep our privat life out of the poetry section...loool


Jokin nice drop shawty....felt the emotions in this piece and contend wus tight


peep mine

Facts of life, Fiction in stripe~

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Ok Ruthless if you say so anyway thnx yall
can I get some mo feedback tho'
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can u gimme some feedback on mine..."Sick of Discrimination"..please.

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Not being.....rude, but why did you post to ask me to post.....is that freeposting???
I dont know but uh yeah I guess I'll check it out
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I was really thys peice..nice job...1!