I have laughed as you have cried
I have lived as you have died
I love to make you hated
I am held above as you are degraded
I steal your future & prey on your past
I am socially accepted as you become an outkast
I am a dealer of darkness;a deliverer of pain
I will smoke your lungs & collapse your veins
All you posses will be lost or traded
As i turn the people you love into those you have hated
I will take all the things that you have dreamed about
After all they are things you can live without
I will cover your body all over with sores
Then take all the people you love to even the scores
I come straight from hell believe me its true
The father of darkness brought me to you
I am a master deceiver;a father of lies
So far ahead of the game,I need no alibis
I have heard you scream,"My god its not true!"
As I snatch your childeren from you
I am good at deception you are unable to see
As i snatch them away you seek comfort in me
I will open my arms & pull you into my chest
Then cradle you up on the day of your death
So come join me in my misery
Your heart & your soul are my only fee!

NOTE-never believe anyone when they say drugs kant hurt you cuz what you just read r sum examples of wat they kan do to a person so every1 stay up and in good health hope you enjoyed it uppin 4 some feedbak~alratoz~NOTE

dats was a good poem i really dont understand da title to it but the poem was hott keep doin yo thang

I was feeling the poem... on some parts as i scanned the poem
i thought that they wouldnt sound right b/c the lines are extremely
uneven but as I was reading everything seemed to fall in place
this poem has some good metaphors.. you really gave the addiction
personality traits... and brought out just how evil this thing is...
on a whole i give it a 6... 1 bein the lowest... Keep Writing

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its cool how this reads as if it were the drug taking. you got your thoughts across very strong in this piece i think, and made it interesting. i liked the whole idea of how you approached this topic, but i felt the beginning, structure wise, was better then the end of the piece. the opener was strong, and the ending of the story fit nicely. in a few lines the beats didnt even out, and would sound better with one less/more word, have to watch careful for those. flowed well. vocab could be brought up. content was good. detail was half way id say. all and all it was a strong nice read.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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yeah, good concept, i just thought the line:

i love to make you hatred

threw me off a little, but it was still a good piece, i like the scheme, consistent and you made a simple yet effective piece of writing..good.