eh ok....umm im def feelin the flow, 1st thing i noticed and caught, everything else seemed like generic statements, i mean yea it would be nice to have some metas in there, def some similies, ur multis werent actually multis due to the syllables.....its not a multi unless its a phrase or more than 2 syllables at least....ur structure was good which made it easy to read.....this was more of a freestyle i take it....maybe it was a keystyle......so ill judge it as that......which still made it ok......