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Old 08-19-06, 11:55 PM   #1
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A Life Of Chryme
 
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Love stumbles

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The sunsets sweat begins to drip
A days work is over or is it?
Butteflies flying at dusk
No bat's insight; peacefull
The loved ones are lip locked
Hearts sprung blooming gracefully
Its not overated no
Its unheard of;Not believed in
Happiness is not granted
It is achieved
Though many look past
Though the past looks foward
Which doesnt make since.
Because the future looks back.
The lovers past is not forgotten
Though the future is thought apon
Peace is never gained..nor is trust
They will not suffer no
Because though their lips were locked
She was sly she found the key
She is free...her lips now unlocked

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Old 08-21-06, 02:20 AM   #2
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ok this was somewhat an enjoyable but somehting in this was telling me you forced some of your lines to try and fit in....i mean you did GOOD dont get me wrong but it feels like you just through sentences in without thinking about em sometimes but this made me think and made me enjoy my time reading it, its worth the read..... so nice up's on it my dude!...
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