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10-16-06, 12:58 AM
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Broken Pianists
IP: 3C3A DA95
Broken Pianists Classical rhapsody wraps around me The tunes scandal and scramble. Scrabble to intertwine enthusiastically. Devious inventions detract precisely Fingers caress various notes of sound Emotions driven to an exact path To bedazzle thousands in a crowd . . . Fantasized fallacy pronounced in a classical Mechanically, my hands move in obedience Tears descend hugging, screeching my cheek Carpel tunnel non visible nor existent Hands speak in it’s own tone and language Expressing emotions through melodic diagrams, Tears play the tune of excruciating pain. Tainted perpendicular analogues engorge Tapings entice and derive to deceive Achieved grievance alluded and injected contagiously . . . Hands clash and hold to let one go This applause sounds so familiar of a time When my ART ment something, now it just fades To the next act so i fade along the sidelines Dwelling and thinking "i remember my first show" Now i just get played by the shows to the next person who bows to take they're stand that was my home Rows filler up…off contingents of deception Bilateral confrontations excess admirably. Parched for a drip of water, a taste of life As the skin frails the wooden tart, it cuts. Blood clots of aspiration, partake with benevolence Such a goal is complete, such a feel is gone Within the minutes of walk-a-way’s up and go I take a bow in thanks; you wave good-bye in good luck. I walk away in appreciation, you walk away in fascination Close my eyes in pride and happiness Your eye’s has always been closed, the tunes of you play.
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10-16-06, 01:04 AM
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IP: 3C3A DA95
blat.
BUMPITY BUMP my friends...feed pls.
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10-17-06, 05:18 PM
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illmatic
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IP: 10D7 5181
deep. I like your mind frame in your work.
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10-22-06, 07:55 PM
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IP: 3C3A DA95
upping this and thanks for the feed.!.
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10-30-06, 05:14 PM
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Human Crack in The Flesh.
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IP: 0992 DDA2
it was good...I'll be looking forward to be seeing that in our little scuffle (Damn, why'd Kempo have to put me up against a poet...) lol
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12-03-06, 08:24 PM
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You Love My Style.
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IP: 1599 B446
Am impressed...imagery was close to perfect. Transitions was nice...overall theme was on point...nice one fam
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12-03-06, 11:22 PM
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IP: 8AEB 01A9
Love the theme of this poem. Felt ya coulda used more imagery in this piece. But overall i give this poem an 8/10.
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