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12-14-06, 03:25 PM
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WhoAreYou?
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1st poem
IP: A181 D033
to the blind eye i am feared by none
in reality i am feared by all to most i am evaded to some i am embraced the educated have ways of chasing me away however i am always lingering and i will find you.... |
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12-14-06, 03:35 PM
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Banned: Pink Slipped
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IP: C2BA 4E39
Interesting whats this about?
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12-14-06, 05:30 PM
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WhoAreYou?
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IP: A181 D033
death .
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12-27-06, 02:34 PM
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New to RV
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IP: 321F 1038
i can dig it not bad at all
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01-19-07, 04:21 PM
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IP: EB42 EC5D
good shit man...sounds like you like the dark shit....the only real peice of advice i have for you is that you dont have to double space to make it look bigger....try on the other hand to make it longer lol you kinda left the reader hanging....
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01-23-07, 04:03 AM
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Above Originality
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IP: 3BAC BEF8
this was a nice feel in it with your emo dark as wanting and liking shit liek that lmfao.. but yea man you had some nice wording aswell but a hint with lyrical is that your double space shit is irritating man....make it though a bit longer aswell unless your got a very deep and nice wording that you can suma whole story with a nice wording and grammar stature in a few lines then by all means do it!...but yea nice dorp man!.
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