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Old 03-07-04, 01:06 PM   #1
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$..dolla..$

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YO .....YO...HERE WE GO

you cant mess im the best
"is that correct sir"
"YES!!!"
"NO!!"
"IM NOT SURE!!!"
im a better rapper than tupac shakur and fatman scoop
but he's just fat he's not cool
im also a better rapper than ja rule and biggie small
and definitly p.diddy but thats all!
many people have been jelaous of my lyrical skill
because literally with theese words i can kill
i will pull them out the air and stab u in the chest
u be wishin u were wearin a bulletproof vest
under ure amarni shirt
wich i meant to tell u i rubbed it in the dirt
wich is a waste of a 150 dollas witch u spent in that shop
hopfully in this game ill go straight to the top
but stop people dont take this seriously they think its a game
they only wanna do it cuz of the fame
to have all the money and to be a star,to have a big house to drive a fast car
id always b lucky to have a dolla
if u liked this rap...go on HOLLA!!!!!
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Old 03-07-04, 01:07 PM   #2
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im sorry to any fat kids who find this ofennsive....ha ha ha ha
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Old 03-08-04, 09:35 AM   #3
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This was ok....nothing really good....try adding some multies to your pieces to make them more complex and also add some internals maybe to help the flow out....the content was ok...should try writing about something else than this kind of stuff.....but keep at it.
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Old 03-12-04, 06:41 PM   #4
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borin realy...no real flow or anyfin
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