ima jus key it!!!an i love honesty...dont be shy!!!!


non stop like perpetual motion,stingin like a bee like a butterfly im floatin
man these bars are potent,poisen for your mind so i hope ya ears aint open
realness'll have u overdosin,cuz the truth u suk be leavin ya heart 2 broken
bitch niga's b soft spoken,bullets to thay mouth leave the casket closin
foes aint picked mane they chosen, put on slabs, relitives like "man he frozen"
so know wen'to give up for the gat starts blowin'

death on the blok is non stop,dont know how deep u is till u get popped
neva think youll get shot, till u relize the slug in ya chest is real hot
an a bullet give a fuk if u like it or not,and dont care if its in a life alterin spot
dead before you know it ya casket is dropped,while ur in hell like why did i bust dat knock.............


feedbak please

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3165812
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=242129

nice multi's think I'm bout to drop sum..... but it's always good to see somebody use multi's... smh @ myself talkin like multi rappers are dead..... but anyways nice vocab... keep writing man

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I'm Sicker Than Tha Plauges That God Sent Moses-Chosen

nice for it being short...i like the wordplay u had going...~1~

could use quite a bit of work, as far as structure goes, flow and everything, lyrics were bleh...keep up.

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flow was decent.. multis was decent...
a few played lines and few raw lines...
all around decent drop....

RTF

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Fear

exactly what homo said above me..lol he's gonna be pissed when he reads this. but uhh..yea needs some work..ya need to work on ya structure n flow dude..maybe sum better vocab

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i liked it ur multis are tight man, da punchlines could of been a little stronger but overall it was a good peice of work look out for my verse called FameAss

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Im just startin to get in the Swing of usin Keys for a bar
& how ironic im throwin them same keys in your mommas Jar!

Work on it... You just need to play with that cadence and get little more rhythm in it. Basically all you got is some rhymin worda that don't go together to well. If you want it to flow right think to yourself "Is this something I would actually say?" like if you were going to say "Man my money's so right" but you wanted to squeeze it in by sayin "Man, so right is my money" it just won't work

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Bet the dice if you're ready to gamble...............