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01-19-06, 03:02 PM | #1 | ||||
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Young Pilgrims
IP: ED44 3CD2
Young Pilgrims
A cold and wet November dawn And there are no barking sparrows Just emptiness to dwell upon. I fell into a winter slide And ended up the kind of kid who goes down chutes too narrow Just eking out my measly pies. But I learned fast how to keep my head up 'cause I Know there is this side of me that Wants to grab the yoke from the pilot and just Fly the whole mess into the sea. Another slow train to the coast Some brand new gory art from way on high I sink and then I swim all night. I watch the ice melt on the glass While the eloquent young pilgrims pass And leave behind their trail Imploring us not to fail. Of course I was raised to gather courage from those Lofty tales so tried and true and If you're able I'd suggest it 'cause this Modern thought can get the best of you. This rather simple epitaph can save your hide your falling mind Fate isn't what we're up against there's no design no flaws to find There's no design no flaws to find. But I learned fast how to keep my head up 'cause I Know I got this side of me that Wants to grab the yoke from the pilot and just Fly the whole mess into the sea.
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01-19-06, 05:30 PM | #2 | |||
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IP: 0825 899A
*Shakes Head* I wish you would fallow the rules. I hate closing your shit because your among the few good writers we get in here
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01-19-06, 05:30 PM | #3 | |||
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IP: 0825 899A
Pm me with two links to have this re-opend.
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01-19-06, 05:31 PM | #4 | |||
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01-20-06, 01:21 PM | #5 | |||
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01-20-06, 01:22 PM | #6 | |||
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01-20-06, 01:36 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
Hey Look This Can Hurt A Man's Eyes I Highly Advise You To Enlar5ge You Print What's Wrong? It Was All Right Couldn't Read Half Couldn't See It But What I Read Was Enjoyable Doe
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01-20-06, 01:46 PM | #8 | |||
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IP: 0825 899A
That's standard size print you jackass. I'm not counting this as adequite feedback if you Pm me this link.
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01-20-06, 04:54 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
SO WHAT YOU TELLING ME WHAT i GOT TO SAY GO FUCK YOOURSELF
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01-20-06, 05:18 PM | #10 | |||
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IP: 3240 794D
You didn't say anything. All you did was complain about his font. How in any way could that ever help him progress as a writer? And don't answer that question... Think about it while you post else where because I'm banning you from here for being an absolute idiot.
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01-20-06, 10:02 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
Naw Fuckk Head You Banning Me Because I Can Rhyme Circles Aroun You, Bonecollecter And Drake Hell Bonecollecter Won't Post Untile I'm Banned Yall Boys The Wackiest Jealous No T6alent Cats I Ever Had To Deal With
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01-24-06, 06:58 PM | #12 | ||||
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IP: 12CD 59BB
Lumber shut the fuck up........and as for the poem dure dopeness...how long did it take you to write and we should collab. for sho....better yet Barr Atticus and Myself<<<now that would be sick.....great drop keep em coming
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